This was really good! I liked how you stayed close to what CS Lewis wrote. Oh, and I loved this part:

"'Now you sound just like Lucy…'

'Thank you.'"

And then Peter goes on talking as if she hadn't said anything. It just fits him so perfectly!

Amazing! Finally, I've read something like this with a SENSE! I love it when you're not adding someone in the story and, I don't think that it's a spoiler at all...it's very practical though! I love it still, on how you personalized the character of Eustace and Jill and EVERYONE! L-O-V-E i-t! =) God bless

WOW! -stares in awe-

I love, love, loved it, as I've told you. It's beauutiful. The ending is rather sad though... *sniffles* Anyways, I love how you've brought the little bit that C.S. told us about the train crash and Susan forgetting Narnia and whatnot in TLB and made it into a whole story; gave it more life. Wonderful. *favoritizes*