omg this was auwsume. i can beleave demeter i thought she would come back as some as she saw munkustrap or when bomby came over. write more like write about when the get the jellicles i cant wait!

Wow . . . that was strong and powerful.

The odd thing is how easy it was for me to imagine Demeter in that position; becoming evil after nobody listened to her pleas.

Awesome job with this. =^..^=

-jelliclesoul635

I told them it would happen~ You gotta love that ending. Sounds like me after my pyromaniac of a friend was just exposed to an open campfire...Anyways, just for drama and the halarity of it all I would make that line a seperate paragraph.

If it was slightly fasted paced and a few errors it definatly had potential and it had me laughing my head off. I rather fancy the title of "Warehouse Queen" Tehe!

I liked how you kept it a one-shot, great job once again!