All right! Bastila is here!
I quite like this so far, and the detail is astounding. I like your Exile, I can't wait for your Revan, and Sakira rocks!! That's all I would like to say other than:

I'll be watching...

Really interesting. I'm curious to see how you plan on developing this. Most people who write post-KotOR II fics just start with a pre-existing character or make up a random third Jedi to chase after the first two. Sakira's very unique as a fanfic character, and it's a refreshing change. Same with Aric. I also like the way you stay in the character's perspectives. I mean, from the interlude and prelude, we as readers know we're dealing with a lightside female Revan and Exile, Kayda and Asherea. But since Sakira doesn't know about them and the Ebon Hawk, you don't show any sign of it. It's interesting to see things through her eyes. Great chapter; I'll be on the alert for more updates.

Wow. Great Atton-Kayda interactions. Mira was also awesome, even though there wasn't much of her. I'm glad those are the two that went with her--they're my favorite party members. Kayda drunk was funny. It does make me wonder exactly where and when this is occurring, though. I mean, you gave a general temporal idea through context, but still... Definitely looking forward to future updates.

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Er. . .what I meant to say was that I very much like the distinctive voice of your OC, who is clearly not the Exile. ;) Righto. Anyway, I enjoyed the brisk pace of this chapter--Sakira's stream-of-consciousness narration is a fun read. I'm interested to find out what's behind this ship and why it's storing prisoners who may or may not be Jedi. The action was well done.

I agree with Thingie that the shift in POV was a little disconcerting. eats asteriks, so it might be that you tried to separate that way and it wouldn't let you. You can insert a horizontal rule in the simple editor (it's up next to the editing buttons) or put in an hr break at the end of your paragraph in the html editor. Also, I think it would help if you put in some tags to help us know who's talking, like "she said" and "Aric told her" and so forth. It's easy for your reader to get lost in long conversations otherwise.

I'm looking forward to chapter 3!

Another good chapter; the action was appropriately tense, and there was a lot more this time, which I liked very much. ;) I guess we'll have to wait to find out a bit more about both Sakira and Aric in coming chapters, seeing as they're too busy running for their lives in this one. Also, Sakira's intriguing ability to sense technology - there has to be a story behind that, no?

There were a couple of rough spots here and there. The sudden shift in perspective when Aric wakes up was a little confusing, since it goes straight from what Sakira's seeing to what he's seeing without warning. Also, having the first encounter with the security droids in present tense, while it does ratchet up the tension, feels out of place stuck right up against the rest of the past-tense story (as does the bit right at the end, though it didn't jar me as much). Perhaps a divider (er, I'm not sure what you call them really, but those things that usually take the form of three asterisks) when a shift like either of those happens would make it more obvious what's going on?

Looking forward to more - it seems there are quite a few mysteries still to be solved. :)

I like this a lot so far - especially for giving me hope that somewhere, somehow, someone might write a "KotOR I" fic that is actually good.

The story is engaging, moves along at just the right pace, and Sakira herself seems like a real person, not just a flat placeholder like so many OCs. My only complaint would be that it's too short. I want to know what happens next! :')

Anyways, great job - I'm looking forward to reading more, and finding out just what's going on here. *thumbs up*

Holy cow, there is someone else, who is many persons in one.

Nice premise. I look forward to reading more.

This has some potential. I very much like that you have a tech-edged Exile; most Exiles are pretty thinly drawn, more a Revan-lite than a real character. Your Exile has a nicely distinct voice that doesn't immediately sound like a Mary Sue. Lots of suspense built in the first few chapters here--where is she, why is the captor hoarding Jedi, and what happened to the Exile's crew? I look forward to seeing more of this.

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This is interesting. In the interest of keeping things concise, I'm going to point out a few things...
1. It should be "war-ravaged", not "war ravaged".
2. "affected", not "effected"
3. I'm not sure that saying "But the Outer Rim has troubles of its own" makes sense because it implies that it was a peaceful area, when in the previous paragraph/sentence/whatever you said that there were wars going on. I'm just mentioning that.
4. "great civilization": make sure there's a space. Haha, I'm picky like that.
I really think this looks interesting...I don't know much about the "Knights of the Old Republic" except for the video game, but this looks good so far. This part in particular caught my interest: "On the Outer Rim, on the edges of the Unknown Regions, beyond the reach of Republic power, independent planets continue to wage war on one another, to form fragile coalitions and powerful alliances, to turn on and betray one another, barely effected by the troubles of the larger galaxy." It's very much in the tone of the Star Wars movies' "crawls" and I think you're doing a good job thus far. Keep up the good work!
Ciao,
Ivy :)

This looks like a great fan fic. Please keep writing, it seems great! Good luck, I'll keep reading.