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iamnuff
2009-09-13 . chapter 1
put a cock in it!

lol
Sdarian
2009-06-01 . chapter 7
Great job! Keep it up!
Innortal
2009-04-14 . chapter 7
Bravo! Damned good, and have us all looking forward to seeing what Chapter 8 has to offer.
Nysk
2009-04-11 . chapter 7
Heh, good chapter.

Making porn for the future..
Nodoka & Rei facing off.. I want to know who wins that one!

And where are Ami & Hotaru taking Ranma?
Hiryo
2009-04-10 . chapter 7
Thanks for updateing and pelase update soon this enjoyable goodie!
Dumbledork
2009-04-10 . chapter 7
Brilliant.
dogbertcarroll
2008-03-30 . chapter 6
I think the magic isn't going to be transforming him into a girl anytime soon as he'd probably rather die then do so the way its been handling it. Lets see the semi-sentient magic deal with someone who'd rather croak then use it.
Pyromage Shikaze
2008-03-21 . chapter 6
that was some funny shit, although i was expecting a bit more lemon, because of the M rating, but funny nonetheless
Tai Khan
2008-01-18 . chapter 6
Overall, not too bad, but I think you may be attempting to add too many crossover elements and it's detracting fromt the story.

As for the humor...felt a might forced. Mainly due to the magic going from 'semi-aware' to 'malevolently cruel and spiteful', not too mention uncaring as to whether or not its 'host' was needlessly endangered in order to be taught a 'lesson' for being 'ungrateful'. Ungrateful for what might I ask? This was Ranma's first real attempt to actively and willingly use his new magical abilities. And what would a semi-aware bit of magic care about what it's host felt about it?

As I stated, feels forced. And really serves no purpose other than to discourage Ranma from drawing upon such abilities again save for life or death situations. Self-defeating, as by that time it's likely to be too late.

And no, I've never cared for those fics that base their humor upon how thoroughly they can screw over a character (physically, mentally and emotionally) until the readers begin to question why that character hasn't committed suicide to make the suffering stop.

Up until this chapter you were doing fairly well. Not great, but it was enjoyable. I actually found this chapter rather difficult to complete.
Dumbledork
2008-01-07 . chapter 6
You're selling yourself short. This was very funny, especially the bit with Al Bundy defeating the monster. Hmm... will the magic screw with Ranma for a while longer. There's still so many possibilities to have fun with the unifroms. But I think that for later on the She-Ra outfit would be great as standard uniform.
Innortal
2008-01-06 . chapter 6
Definitely a good go.
Dumbledork
2008-01-03 . chapter 5
Absolutely BRILLIANT. One of my favourite funny fics ever. Can't wait for more.
Jax9
2008-01-02 . chapter 5
Keep Writing!
Innortal
2008-01-02 . chapter 5
A bit confusing and all, but I may have forgotten something from the earlier chapters.

Still in all, a great read, and I look forward to seeing what you add next to Ranma's growing trouble.

BTW, it is Haruka (Sailor Uranus) and Minako (Venus), you used Minoko a lot.
Jax9
2007-09-23 . chapter 4
Keep Writing!
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