Pervy football comments! Nice.

Good one! I like it! *thumbs up*

Anyway, its a great story.. and I like the part that Mamori actually, really, did the 'bite' tongue thing.. lol

Make more, okay...? :)

This is absolutely amazing.

I love how you easily intertwined football terms in their conversation about relationship conditions. It flowed so well, and it was SO like them!

And that last bit about Hiruma's air of purpose visible in his step was genius.

You also wrote Hiruma wonderfully in character while he attempted to start something with Mamori. I personally love the lines, "Next time I'll, like, fucking signal with my eyes or something," and "It's dark and I'm a fucking gentleman."

I love how he's shooting at animals while he's walking her home. -_- *giggles*

Adorable. I ilke how they make football references. Too cute.! I'm faving.

Really Cute. I was looking for material like this. I love the couple. Hope you keep on writing!

how come i found this fic in the spanish section? O.o; Anyways! It was, umm.. interesting! My fav quote was this:

“What? It’s dark and I’m a fucking gentleman.”

Gentleman, eh? Yeah, right! XD I also liked the part of him shooting at them lil' critters ]

Now that was interesting! Hiruma making comparisions between dating and football sound very possible. I could practically see that in my head.