Not bad, not bad at all. Some very few OOCness but still a pretty good try. Keep up the good work for next time!
*Hermi-kô***

I loved this! So freaking good!

I love this so much!

I always ship Hiruma x Mamori hehehe

Wow,you really seem like a hardcore fan of the series because this is just like an "extension" of the manga itself. You portrayed Hiruma and Mamori really well. Unfortunately I never get to know the content of the letter. But ironically that is the true charm of the story. Letting the readers to fill it up with their own imagination. Keep it up! :)

I liked how realistically you characterized Mamori. It made everything super funny, and maybe even a little sad at the end. You really communicated her earnestness and honesty.

Didn't know Hiruma smokes O.o

I like this story. It looks somehow like a Mamori POV, and I think you succeeded on it.

Thank you !

ahh... a wonderful hirumamo fic after such a long time.. wonderful really... i can't stop grinning..

very good characterization and on-point grammar.. :)

will go into 'my favorites'

thanks for making my day!

I love your writing style! You've completely captured Mamori and Hiruma, congrats. I especially loved how you went a little deeper into Mamori's thoughts about the letter and why she was doing it.

And you made Hiruma sound cool instead of completely pissed off and abusive like everyone else makes him seem towards Mamori.

My heart-felt thanks for that. haha

-K

hm i think mamori would like kill him and like not like him if he was smoking

sweet! i was laughing all the time even with my toes curling with the thrill...

very nice...got it set up well, and the dynamic in the conversation is good

Love the story!

And I agree that Hiruma is so sexy XD

More HiruMamo please _

CONTINUE! This is damn good! I love the HiruMamo pairing

well its a good read.

keep it up!

for the sake of starving hirumamo fans!

like me!

...Well...Your story is One of the best Hiruma X Mamori I have ever see! Every time I Re-read it... My smile start to grow, for ending near my ears! You use words in a simple style...but very realist! Characters are respected...It's beautiful. will you write anymore?

That was great! I loved it...

Ah, I'm so jealous. I tried to write this pairing and it just ended up being depressing. _ I just loved this. It was so in-character and just... has the goofy feeling of the series in it, and, yeah. Mamori answering Hiruma's fanmail and wondering if she's crazy for being jealous. Awesome.

I would adore seeing another chapter in this.