Uhm... Oooookay. Kinda random... and pointless... but that's okay! I guess...

You kind of repeat the same lines over and over. And I've seen a lot of these types of stories. It's very sad, but I bet you could make it a whole lot more compelling now that you're so much more experienced.

Also, the third line says "I'm trying tell you" instead of "I'm trying to tell you".

This story was great. It has a compeling title, and it kept me sorta guessing what was wrong with it.

Now for the idiot side of me to speak: THAT MEAN TRAINER!

Lovely. It makes me cry. They don't listen, do they? Poor Squirtle.

Wow. This was so sad. Ur good at writing sad POV poems. I really enjoy reading ur writing, or typing... Ur my idol!

I can feel strongly for Squirtle because I HATE IT when people won't listen to me! When they act like I'm invisible and they won't listen to my side of the story when I've listened to theirs countless times! The trainer needs to go bother someone else or take anger management courses. Really a strong message, if you take the time to really think about it.

-spiritwolf101-

what i like about your fics is that they give an feeling of reality to a cartoon. your good, very good.

Dat vas interistin'. Vy am I tiyping lik zis? Who's knows, who cares.

Jaja very funny!

Aww, poor Squirtle ... ergh, my reviews are getting shorter 'n shorter 'cause it's almost 3:30 in the morning X_X Very good 'fic! _

oh, how sad...poor Squirtle...

I can't help but love this. I've read this a few times so I thought I better put a comment in. .;

That's sad, but I liked! ;_;

I fell sorry for Squirtle.

How sad; I feel bad for that Squirtle. You could actually probably delete the words "The squirtle looked up at it's trainer" and still get the point across-the whole poem is the Squirtle's point of view until that line, so it seems kind of strange to have it in there. (Or technically it should be 'its trainer,' not 'it's', but that's OK _-) Very tragic, though.