its good. I really like the descriptive words. i have one question though; is Edward Dying? Or something else? i think you should make that more clear.

why did you write flame with a capital F? are you trying to say Flame as in Flame Alchemist as is Roy Mustang instead of actual fire flames? does that mean that this is a yaoi fic? it makes sense when i read it that way...

Short and emo...I like it!

*Dances around teh burning Ed like a retarded Indian*

BURN ED BURN! BURN ED BURN! BURN ED BURN!

*Roasts marshmallows on teh burning Ed*

Yum, Ed s'mores! :9 *Drools*