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Reviews For: Just Fine

Tanny-san 2007-12-30 ch 1,	abuseThis was really very sweet, and very well-written. I love that things didn't move too fast, and I loved the imagery you used. Riku's total dedication to Sora, and Sora understanding that was absolutely lovely. The characterizations were great, and your writing was very refreshing in the sense that you made things feel very normal. Well done, m'dear! -Tanny
mirai3k 2007-12-22 ch 1,	abuseit's perfect! and you're a very talented writer! I just hope you'd continue this
jediempress 2007-02-06 ch 1, anon.	abuseHey, I was looking up some of your Star Wars stuff cuz I haven't had the internet in a while and lo and behold, I find out you've got some Kingdom Hearts too. My two favorite things by one of my favorite authers. Very cool.
Gohanzgirl 2006-10-14 ch 1,	abuseI love your S/R fics! so wonderfull! You have an amazing writing style that just makes thing's more believable and in character.
SKF 2006-09-30 ch 1,	abuseThe way you describe even the smallest detail, the slightest emotion, makes me sit in awe, every time. I've read this once or twice before and I never get tired of doing so. Lovely story!
sango 2006-08-31 ch 1, anon.	abuseaww.. very cute.. a little sad, but still very cute
Ice Dragon3 2006-08-18 ch 1,	abuseThis is simply amazing. You're so good with descriptions, and making everything seem realistic. Sora's reaction over his breakup with Kairi, the slight awkwardness after Riku abruptly kissed Sora, Sora deciding to sleep over at Riku's(!), you make it all so real. And (I'm sure I've said this before, but I'll say it again) I love how there's just hints and small sentences that loosely tie this in with your other KH kids story. It gives everything a sort of connection, without everything having to conform and fit perfectly. I have to say, one of my favorite lines was "Riku's mom had divorced his father when Riku was six on irreconcilable differences, the main difference involving that Riku's dad was a jackass." It was just a dry sort of humor, and I found it really funny. I also loved the sentence talking about Riku making valentines for Sora, I saw a mental picture of that and it was so adorable! But, of course, I love every sentence in this story. I just can't quote them all, now can I? ;) The only sentence I didn't love was the one with a mistake (I'm sorry, I can't help finding them XD). You wrote: "Riku half wanted to roll his eyes from the waves of emo roiling from Sora..." somewhere near the top of this chapter. I think we both know what's wrong with that. :) But on the bright side, that was the only mistake I found, so you've done an amazing job of writing this. Even the almost god-like writer (in my mind, lol) J. K. Rowling makes mistakes in her writing. My mom pointed out a time where she wrote 'tuition' instead of 'tutoring' (book five)--I think maybe this 'must correct writing' is a gene or something. My granddad was an editor for a newspaper. One time I read a book with terrible grammar, and it almost killed me. I really, really, -really- wanted to bring out a red pen and fix it, but I have a policy to not mark on books. Even if the teacher at school asks us to jot down notes in our books, I won't do it. I put sticky notes on the pages instead. Er...sorry about the side-tracking rant. XD I figure, we know each other so you won't mind if I get off topic a little. This feels more like a casual conversation than a stranger-to-stranger review to me. Back to the point: I really love this fic, and if you want to write another chapter or so...I really want to read it. I think that it's good as a one-shot, but that it has greater potential as a mult-chaptered story. There's just so much left to be written, you've left it so open-ended. Sometimes it's good to let the reader's imagination fill in the gaps, but sometimes it's good to define the story a little more yourself. It can be hard figuring out how much you should write, and when you should stop. You don't want a story to drag on too much, but at the same time you don't want it to 'die' as an infant. If any of that makes sense, let me know. :) I hope to see an update.
IntertwinedxDestinies 2006-08-14 ch 1,	abuseGreat story! The plot is great, it's well-written, and I just love the Riku/Sora-ness! They're great with comforting each other XD...It works well as a one-shot, but I think it would be just fine with chapters...You can decide what way you want to go, but it's great either way!!
argh im emily 2006-08-13 ch 1,	abuseaww, that was sweet. i think you should continue it
XtinethePirate 2006-08-12 ch 1,	abuseOh, sister. This is just really beautiful. I dont even know what else to say about it other than that. I am constantly astounded at how REAL you make everything feel in your fics, the little details that you pick out that make the reader laugh and realize that that's how things are in their lives too and just... wow. The emotions are always so heartfelt and true, not overbearing, and yet not so subtle that they can be missed. Your fics, your characters and settings just BREATHE life right off the computer screen. Fantastic. big hugs I wish I had a Riku to send you though! X
iersan 2006-08-12 ch 1,	abuseI would LOVE for this fic to turn into a multi-chaptered story. :3 I realy enjoyed how Riku was, being angry with himself and all that. Really great. ;) I'm definitely keeping an eye on this story just in case you get inspired to write more. :D
The Glass Slipper 2006-08-11 ch 1,	abuseAw, that's so damn sweet. I loved Riku in this. All protective and caring and perfectly wonderful. No wonder Sora couldn't stay away for long! This is a great little plot. It opens the door for so much angst, but also really touching sweetness. Aww. And you wrote it beautifully. There was just enough humor in there too. The characters were so likable. I mean, Sora, at the beginning, being all noble was so cute. And Riku throughout. The whole thing just reads really well. Highly enjoyable. Such a great mix of everything I want to read. There wasn't a boring moment at all. And it was orignal and realistic enough that I liked it in spite the RxS overload I'm experiencing. But that's my own fault. Anyway, enough about that, fanastic job! Oh, and I think you managed to say a lot about where their relationship is going in this. It doesn't feel incomplete. But of course, if you have an idea for it, I'd totally read!
lunarxshinobi 2006-08-11 ch 1,	abusegreat story
SnowGummi36 2006-08-11 ch 1,	abuseThis was really good, and I liked it a lot. It's cool that all your SoraxRiku oneshots are connected...Great job. :)
the lonely spoon 2006-08-11 ch 1,	abuseHey guess what! I think this is Abso-lutely great. Amazing just, amazing.

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