So amusing! I love chase-centric fics, but this is the first parody I've read where Chase isn't made fun of (in a mean way, that is), or just plainly ignored. Or maybe it isn't, don't really remember, I'm sleepy=S

This was hilarious

I usually don't read House FFs but this one was really
good!
I found this entire story absolutely
hilarious!
Keep up the good work

this is so good. I like it a lot. Sorry it took me,like, 20 years to finish it.

Hah, I loved it >.

The flying monkey forms and Stacy's melting makeup are cracking me up.

This is brilliant! I love the Wizard of Oz and am about to piss in my pants laughing at the way you've Housified it. Brain surgeon needs a brain; House gets a heart; Cowardly Wilson... excellent! I'm glad you made Chase "Dorothy" instead of Cameron.

Hello dear. I thought I would finish up while my class was working on morning study. You brought Chase back into character a little. You weren't completely in character with your story, but this is a parody and would be impossible for you to do so. You stuck to the Wizard story line very well. The plot is well defined and very easy to follow.
Some points tht will help you improve, structure seems to be your biggest downfall, don't worry to much about it though because this is an amatuer site and everyone is guilty of it. If you were to write something in hopes to be published you would need to work on a solid structure.
Your timeline is a bit rushed which makes the ending seem almost as if it has been forced or you didn't know how to end it. Don't be afraid to ask a friend for advice or suggestions in this area. Slow down and take it one step at a time, remember this site will always be here. You don't have to spread yourself thin to try and get a story finished by an invisable dead line.
Take a step back and try to read your story as if you were seeing it for the first time, its a hard task but it can prove to be very helpful. I find that looking at your work from an unbias view point can do wonders for editing.
My students are getting restless so I must leave you now, I thought teaching high school would be easier but I was wrong. I hope that this will help you in future works. Good luck, and keep writing. The best way to get better is to keep writing.
Tina

I don't think anybody likes being talked down to and I apologize for coming off that way. I take writing very seriously and do give out critiques that can be very critical but I've been teaching for six years and its like a second nature to me.
It wasn't you who responded, it was another writer, I won't state thier name here because I wish to respect their privacy. Judging by thier message it was someone that you know. Thank you for responding to my last review, it is always best to respond to people on your own it makes you seem more adult. And yes being eight teen and a junior in college is a great acomplishment, I bet your family is very proud.
My name is Tina Fry, I'm a 31 year old teacher and mother of 2, I live in Washington. The last fight I had with someone was with my sister in law Lisa, taking a wild shot here but your not Lisa right? I'm sorry to hear that you had a fight with someone, but it wasn't me. I just set up this account because a few of my students have accounts here and I wanted to see what they were up to. This seems to be a very popular site, it could be just a coincedence. Don't let them discourage you, or if it really is this girl, don't let her discourage you.
I have read your first chapter here, I'd love to finish it tonight but I have papers to grade but here is what I think so far. Starting off in the middle of something is a good idea, it hooks your reader. This you did very well. You are slightly out of character but this is a parody and to be expected so that is just fine. I can't give anything definitive at this point since it is so early on but I will read more tomorrow if I get the chance. One thing to keep in mind for future pieces is structure, full looking paragraphs will make your work look more proffessional. I'll try to get a better review to you later on.
Tina

Hehehehehehehehe! well funny! I loved it, i wouldn't change any of it! Well done, great plot!

Alli

“I don’t see why,” House said, “I mean it’s not like the book hit him where his brains are. Now if he fell on his ass then I’d be worried.” - LOVED IT, the only thing I didn't like about your story was Stacy and House kissing. They are so not meant to be together lol, I liked how she was a witch though.

Hehe, you should have made vogler the dead witch though. *punches window*

I HATE VOGLER!

I'm going to go watch my House DVD, tata.

good story. i enjoyed reading it this summer and i will be expecting the cyber cookie to come before school starts

okay, so i have yet to read this chapter, but i haven't slept or eaten for over 48 hours...fucking work! i will read this, just as soon as i can focus my eyes, thank god for touch typing!

The stairs! *slaps forehead* It's all so obvious now. And House as the tin man *bruises forehead* Another obvious one. For some reason I had him down as the scarecrow (though why he'ld need more brains escaped my thought processes) and Foreman as the tin man.

Anyways, great job. Just keep Chase intact. Bumps and bruises are ok. Death and scars doesn't suit Chase at all (though a Phantom of the Opera style fic has promise, or even just how the hospital would react if he had a tiny cut on his cheek. I see swarming nurses). Oh and don't touch the hair either.

Good story! Thanks for finishing it!