ooohh...confusing,that is concerning the time sequence.but quite good

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Goooooooooooooooooooood, I want to read more. More I say! That was damn cool!

Lovely imagery! Your descriptions are really excellent! Good job!

Wow. Simply put, wow. The language was so evocative,catering to every sense... the whole setting surreal... the whole story was simply beautiful. I've almost never seen a short story so beautiful, this is going in my favorites right away!

Wow. this one is definately your best. Very descriptive, almost to a fault (be careful) but still awesome