this was a great story i hope you will write more stories they will be great so see you next time

Not bad. I read your reveiews and saw that people want you to continue this, but I think it's better left off as a one-shot, honestly, just because (in my opinion) it sounds better this way, and it leaves you to think of what happens. It also gives Ino's death a bit more finality. If you DID decide to continue it, I'd read it of course. Good job, this is a nice story :)

that is so sad

this story is good but i think that you should continue it
pls continue this story instead of making it a one shot because this one shot doesnt feel complete with just this one chapter

I know you intended this as a one-shot, but I really think you should continue it. Even the ending you give isn't appropriate. It was very well done, but there isn't a sense of finality to it aside from you saying 'FIN.' This was really good and I highly suggest you continue doing an additional chapter. You mentioned a few characters. Sakura, Kiba, and Ino, mainly. What about everyone else? Where are they and what are they doing? How will Sakura react when she sees Sasuke and thinks of all the people that died? Again, excellent chapter. I hope you continue it.

Shadowhound