Hey! Aika here! i know I'm amazing...Do what Jess says and update because if you don't I'll have to get me robot and threaten you 'till ya finish!
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oh and good story
Aika (have i said that?!)

This is really suspensful Jess! Who's the guy in the car? Whay is he stopping? You aren't going to be mean and not update until you get a certain number of reviews are you?!

I hope you get to continue doing this for your English. It's really interesting! The bit where you said "I’ve always liked being on my own, he though to himself. Even as he thought it, he felt a pang in his heart as a mother ushered her son inside." made me nearly cry!! Please update soon. :-]