 Spawn Guy 2006-08-24 . chapter 1That was insanely fast, full of spelling errors, and just plain to weird. Violator is strong enough to knock over Spawn and Spidey at the same time, but has to run away because of a couple of bullets that he could always shrug off? Buildings just randomly collapse? Spidey automatically knows the earth and "it's inhabitants" are in danger? And while I know Spawn is incredibly anal about keeping people out of his alleys, I doubt he'd randomly chase someone from the top of a church. Your style is as fast and confusing as an out of control roller coaster, only really short. I'd suggest getting a beta reader or spell check before righting another chapter. |