Wow. I haven't read a Final fantasy story in quite sometime and to pick yours as a start was an excellent choice. you did a remarkable job, and your choice in words is just...extraordinary! You must continue, hm? I would very much enjoy it.

Love your writing! Please continue.
Never seen Quistis having such dark thoughts before. I'm wondering how the encounter with Seifer will go :)

oh! i must say that i really enjoy your writing style. this is an interesting start and i'm excited to see where it goes! keep it up! (: