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Reviews for: The Unknown Prophecy
Miss Quartermain
2007-02-24 . chapter 2
nice. i'm really curious about this prophesy.
Anare Silvermoon
2006-11-02 . chapter 2
Ok. I beg you update this story soon. Or I'll send my evil bunnies at you! Mwahahaha ^_^
steelelf
2006-08-19 . chapter 2
Catherine? No. Say it's a typo, please! It's not elvish, rohirric, dwarven, or even common! And I'm not even canon police!
steelelf
2006-08-19 . chapter 1
The Steward is not the King, nor vice versa.
KaleidescopeCat
2006-08-18 . chapter 1
So is this supposed to be an AU, in that Denethor actually took the throne instead of remaining just Steward? If not, you definitely need to work on your knowledge of the books because Denethor is not, in fact, a king. He is a Ruling Steward keeping the rule of Gondor in trust for the king. Nor are Boromir and Faramir princes--eventually, Faramir will be named the Prince of Ithilien but that isn't until after the War of the Ring. At this point, it's hard to even recognize this as a Lord of the Rings story aside from the names of the characters you use; there's very little accuracy. Granted it's fanfiction, but good fanfiction (unless it's meant to be funny) follows the canon of the universe it's written in.

Canonical errors aside, you would also benefit a great deal from a beta reader. There are a lot of grammatical errors that distract the reader from the story... it would be improved tenfold with some simple grammatical corrections.
iceduchess
2006-08-18 . chapter 1
This is realy good. Please continue!
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