not bad i acualy like it hope to read your next piece. Bye Bye...

Oh and by the way do you know Brandy Tidwell from Lincoln Prep...

you have a good thought hear, you just need to re-read it to catch some of the odd warding.

Aww. I liked the way you kept in mind how Tetsuo hates Kaneda as well as loving him, which is something a lot of fics with this pairing don't acknowledge. I also liked the way you wrote their first meeting.

I see from your profile that English isn't your first language, and there's a few mistakes in this - perhaps you could have an English-speaking friend look over it to catch them?

Overall a nice read!