looks like it would be an intresting story but why have you not written any other chapters for this story? honestly! you have not written anything beyond chapter one! what people have not been sending you any reviews at all? better get back to writing this story soon!

I like this story. I would like Megaguirus. Keep writing!

1.Stick to either past or present tense. (tip-the majority of literature uses past tense.)

2.Do not make conversational side notes during a narrative.

3.Learn the differnce between possivies and plurals. (ex.-namesmore than one name. "dino's"something the dino owns.)

4.Take the time out of your extreamily busy elementary school life and describe what the dinosaur looks like.

5.Do not be redundant. (Do not use the same word twice in the same sentence to describe something. ex.-the people peacefully living their lives peacefully; "The trees started rustling as the birds took off flying into the trees."

6.Might want to describe Turok's mood in something other than "solemn" the second time in such a short story.

7.In ending a interrogative sentence (a question), use a question mark instead of a comma if it is followed by "said _"

8.Remember what you're writing. (ex.“Whatever. The name isn’t important, what it did does,”. *change to 'Whatever. The name isn't important; what it did is.'

9.Adjectives are your friends.

Nice idea, but it seems too hastily thrown together. It feels rushed. If you paid a little more attention to details, instead of the general activities, it could be very good.

They aren't Godzilla's. They're its dinosaur form from Godzilla vs. King Ghidorah. Here's a brief history. Godzilla before it mutated was a Godzillasaurus, a dinosaur, and it was the size of a T-Rex. The dinosaurs were killed easily, not the current mutated form of Godzilla who is about 50 meters tall, Godzillasaurus is only about 10 meters tall. So the dinosaurs were killed easily, not the mutated Godzilla form.

Wait,I don't get it.A submerine missil couldn't even faze Godzilla and yet,an arrow and a rifle could kill it THAT quickly?This fic doesn't make a lot of sense,but it's still good,keep writing.

Nice beginning! I'd like Megaguirus; Ghidorah's been used loads already, so give the Big M a chance!