good job...hope u gat through ur 'writers block' sooner then later *glomps sis*

Sorry, but this really sucks. You rushed everything, didn't even characterized them in *any* way. Stuttering Heero? Too bit OOC, I say. "Come here, young man I have something for you" ? I think it suits for old old pervert seducing some little girl, not for this situation. I say, you better re-write it, or give up.
It's like a clone to any other vampire fic.