WOAH! Well done! This angsty snippet was perfectly written. You refreshingly managed to keep the boys in character and although the text was a little ambiguous for me to decipher what exactly they were talking about, you definately kept my interests piqued.
I implore you to continue this piece into perhaps a rough lemon-y non-cliche'd story if possible! With this kind of dialogue, you can definately make it believeable :D

You just have these strange images in your stories that stick with me, like the fact that Draco sounds like starch. Wow.
~Ani

aww. confusing, but sweet in a depressing way.

Meloves this. :)

Dear Author,

I greatly enjoyed reading this short little one-shot, it was interesting and different, two characteristics that I think are best, suited for HPDM. Because I loved your story so much I placed it in my C2 community, Silver meets Green. I felt that since it is your story you should be informed of this.

Julie Long

I don't really understand it but it's written very well

Brilliant, but i don't quite understand it :s do you know what i mean? like it's really good and that but i don't really understand why they're like fighting. but apart form that it's all wicked

Wow that was heavy

Ok. This is so good. Dark, eloquent, powerful, and not a little bit sexy. I especially appreciate how you keep them in character. I also enjoyed your use of the present tense, which I normally don't go for. Thank you for enriching the world of Harry/Draco.