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| The Tyrant Hamster 2008-08-05 ch 1,  | abuseHehehe, this is a poetic little drabble. Fate and Luck are quite common in stories, you often see them mentioned with upper-case and all, but here you got much more diverse with personifying emotions. I find it quite fitting, perhaps because given the DMC enemies I can kind of imagine them as actual demons, similar to the Sins from DMC1, or perhaps the aspected Hells of DMC3. In either case the imagery is vivid and it's interesting to see how different this is to your other Lucia fic, both of them are dark and unhappy, but one has her surprisingly mature whereas this portrays her as so vulnerable. It's impressive range, although I feel sorry for the poor girl, someone should write her happy XD. |
| Laylah 2006-10-10 ch 1, | abuseOkay, I'm not a Lucia-hugger, but this little ficlet just made me...think... Yes, she must be ticking over 120kms/h inside because Dante. Very believable, very enjoyable, very well done. Decay, of course, in its putrid arms we shall all end up eh? I need more coffee and more angst-laden Simi fics methinks. |
| Sylla 2006-09-06 ch 1, | abuseAh, 'tis sad. Nice use of metaphors, though. Me likey.^^ |
| Dark Oath 2006-08-27 ch 1, | abuseAnother interesting drabble. I would have been able to tell your mood even if you hadn't said so >.< I hope you're feeling a lot better now. I liked it. Obviously I'm biased as a general rule to the way Trish is portrayed, but then I'm a Trish nut XD But this was good. Thought provoking, and does seem to draw some parallels with how the fans of DMC seem to veiw Lucia, if you get what I mean. Personally, apart from her voice at times, I didn't mind Lucia that much. Guess what? You've just made my fave authors' list. |
| Lori 2006-08-25 ch 1, anon. | abusePoor Lucia... you know I don't really fancy her that much... but that makes me feel bad for her for that lil part... (likes)... (likes ALOT) |
| Daenis TooShy 2006-08-25 ch 1, | abuseI liked the personifications of her feelings like anger and mockery, but the one mistake you made was the 'a' in this sentence: 'She felt used, as though she had never been much more than__ toy' That aside, its well done. I can see emotion had definately gone into this. Daenis |
| The Tyrant Hamster 2006-08-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseOh, I see what you did there, that's really quite artistic for such a short drabble. You used demons to represent emotions, Misery, Anger and so on, which is very fitting as that's what demons often are, conscious negative forces. Then, you inserted Lucia into a situation where she clashed with them, and that scenario in itself was pretty original, I don't think I've seen many, if any, stories of Lucia lamenting Dante not returning, certainly not like this. I guess it was, a parody of some of your own feelings, that would explain why it has such emotion, but in either case, that was, really good for a drabble, made every word count, original and, powerful, cool 8). |