Like so many other fans of Numb3rs, I wanted more from that episode. This story filled in the missing scene quite nicely. :)

This is great. I loved this episode, but I felt like I wanted more. The moments between the Eppes boys (and dad) were my favorite part of NUMB3RS. I thought the writers missed a chance for more great scenes in this episode. You filled the gap beautifully.

Thanks for sharing.

good job! liked this...

Corine

Aw, that was very sweet, and I think it slides into the episode's events quite well. I always thought it was a little jarring to see Don go down, and then a minute later, we see him just fine, with no transition despite a potentially fatal occurrence.

"It was the weakest cough Charlie had ever heard." I really liked how Charlie's anxiety is apparent throughout the entire fic (and remembering about the possibility of diazepam in Don's system), culminating in the development of that question (with Don's unwitting nudge).

"You...okay...?" I loved that line; I think it's an amazing mark of Don's focus on the safety of others. He can barely talk, and knows he's in the hospital, but it just *has* to be for someone else.

I enjoyed reading this, as I have your other works (and responses)-thank you for sharing.

Michelle

Awesome! I like the Charlie and Don interaction, and the way Don's team insisted on being the ones to go in after him. Very nice. I love missing scene fics. You did a great job on this.

:) Mel

That was great. I did wonder about the hospital scene and I like the way that you imagined it.

Well shoot. Apparently I wasn't very good about reviewing a while back. I remember reading this and loving it but I have no idea why I didn't review. So let me say it now - great job! Nice brother moment there at the end and great job of keeping both brothers in character so well. :)

I loved this one, too. Another protocol note on Don entering the house alone: he had already radioed and found his team in active pursuit. He had every reason to believe that Yates was the one they were pursuing and that he was therefore otherwise occupied and that Lindsay was the worst he could be up against. He had no way of knowing that Lindsay and Yates had made the switch.

Excellent story! There isn't enough Don h/c out there so it's great to find another story to add to the few.

I loved the interaction between the team as they rally around Don. But what was best about this story was the very accurately portrayed independent streak of Don, even when he's half-dead, and Charlie's almost pained empathy for a brother he knows is too self-sufficient for his own good (no doubt growing up in the shadows of a child prodigy contributed to that).

You definitely have a talent for 'Numb3rs' fic and I hope to see more fics from you soon!

Wonderful.

I could really see this as a missing sequence.

Your portrayal of Don's team was right on!

Good job and I'm looking forward to reading more of your work!

I've read this before but can't remember if I reviewed. So here it is...

That is the scene that should have been in the episode!

Perfect. Thankyou for filling that gap.

Sasha x

I loved this story very much. Good job!

As I was reading this I wanted to go back and watch the end of the episode Hot Shots. I can't remember exactly what Charlie asked his mother. I *do* remember that is wasn't what I thought he would ask her.

Once again you have done a fine job of staying in charcter and keeping the feel of the show without going overboard.

We love to whump on the guys but what I have seen of the two shorties of yours that I have read is very true to what could potentially be seen on the actual show.

That is hard to do while still keeping it engaging. That is a wonderful skill and you have used it well.

Excellent.

Alice