|Reviews for Unspoken Desire|
| PunkFan1992 11/27/07 . chapter 15
i luv this story please continue
| doCHAI 9/26/07 . chapter 15
just found this story and it was awsome...
i wonder if you will ever update this though...
| RaigeRoller 9/20/07 . chapter 15
I just found this tory and I love it!
| BornThisWay 1/17/07 . chapter 15
I'm just going to rehash my immediate reaction to this chapter so we can all enjoy it LOL
hehehe oh YAY
oh for crying out loud
talk about an anticlimax
they made up!
*throws trash at the authors*
*grabs teh voodoo doll*
You're supposed to take deep breathes and count to ten if you're angry right? One .. two .. three ... four ... five ... six ... seven .. *composes self and moves to pick up trash* sorreh
THIS CHAPTER ... captured emotions, tension, drama and angst perfectly. I love strong courageous Lilian in this fic, it reminds me of her non-kayfabe personality - well, maybe when she's not hiding behind JR and Jack Doan *ahem*
I love the intense interaction between her and .. um him, the way the characters have been built up allows for a powerful exchange which really draws the reader - well,me - in. I was thrilled to see the tension and drama between Lilian and whats-his-face, and then the transition into whiny/irritable Lilian. Gee, I don't know Katie, this punching the wall business seems vaguely familiar, no?
The explosive personality of her counterpart was exciting to read, and the little temper tantrum complemented that perfectly. One liners kill, I'll just say that again, and so does complete and utter innane immaturity by some people LOL ..
We need to start a Hass Foundation and support him in his quest to get glasses methinks .. gee, what a hasshole he is LOL
My one little issue is that she forgave him so quickly! I mean, for all intersive purposes it worked, but I just didn't like it LOL ... all pickness aside, this was a great chapter as always. I really, really like Dr Andrews for some reason ...
Oh well .. Ok, I cave. Rocky was half decent in this, his character is so dominant that it suits Lilian's character perfectly, they gel really well together. I love the way he always has to be the over protective one, though it's slightly frustrating, and I do enjoy the fact that he's there for Lil .. He can be quite the gentleman upon occasion it seems.
Can't wait for more :)
| Pinayprincesa 1/15/07 . chapter 14
Aw Lilian & DJ are so sweet together _
| PsYcHoRoAcH 1/15/07 . chapter 14
Wonderful so far. I read what's posted so far and I love it. I love the pairing.
| BornThisWay 1/15/07 . chapter 14
All I have to say is .. damn skippy, if he moves too fast he will LITERALLY CRUSH HER!
c'mon, I know I'm not the only one who thought that LMFAO
Aww .. I'm so ashamed I saw the alert and I was all hm what the hell story is this? but then i realised and I got really excited LMFAO
I love impetuous, in your face, oh so curious Lilian. God, her one liners make me laugh :) so yesh thanks .. also enjoyed the 'Dr. Lilian, that was cute! great job on the playful interaction as usual! I could see the entire scene in my head, that was totally brilliant!
I seriously thought he was going to propose, and the rocky voodoo doll made an appearance! that equals 3 pins in the chest region, one in the foot, one through the hand and if they get married one through the head :)
KIDDING LMFAO please don't kill me ...
*gags* it was great and all, wish I'd taken that route in my story, proposals aren't my thing LOL
Fantastic stuff as always .. and this review sucks LOL I'll heap praise later ...
but first I must say *ahem*
Charles Robinson is awesome. And such.
(you should give him a cameo)
| Pinayprincesa 11/5/06 . chapter 13
Aw! How Cute are both D and Lil _ They r the two Cutest Big Kids Heart in this story _
| BornThisWay 11/3/06 . chapter 13
well well cameos galore! it's a star studded bbq at the johnson/garcia house .. lmao but do you want to know who my favourite cameo was? torrie wilson haha she was awesome .. torrie in a fic without john cena and randy makes my day! :) (mind you, it'd make my month if kidman showed ...)
one word for this review: (drum roll please) d! haha dwayne is so over protective .. yes, it's cute and all but slightly smothering .. loved steph and trish, vastly enjoyed dwyane giving coach a talking too .. didn't actually figure out how he got invited in the first place lol but whatever works! i love how even though the pairing isn't batista/lilian he still manages to take her aside and there is an underlying currant there .. garcia and volleyball .. i always saw her as a basketball pro to be honest .. that gives me an idea haha
the playful banter between dwyane and lil was orchastrated well, guilt trip garcia was on the case ... all in all, i'm just rambling so i'm going to stop ..you can see the eccenentricities of the writings starting to come out in your work now girls and it really helps the fic along .. it's never boring! can't wait for more ..
| Pinayprincesa 10/31/06 . chapter 12
Aw that was so incredibly Cute! _ I just love Dwayne and Lil together,I do hope they become a family too one day _
| freaak tonight 10/30/06 . chapter 12
Aw! Another great installment.
| BornThisWay 10/29/06 . chapter 12
oh wow! that was just a little ... long lol
but it was great
good to see you back! i hate the severe lack of alerts i keep thinking i'm going to miss out on something ..
anywho. I'm so bad, I forgot Dahlia was pregnant *winces* my memory is going at the ripe ol age of 18 haha!I loved 'Yeah, thanks Uncle D.' That cracked me up, especially since Lilian missed it - not mush gets by her but that obviously did lol I can't wait to see their kids either, that will be interesting .. I'm not quite sure what to make out of this chapter, i enjoyed it, the ideas were great as usual, something just seemed a little .. hmm not sure, I'll get back to you on that one ..loved the character interaction and the simplistic nature of the children, they were captured particulary well. I'll admit I'm not the biggest fan of Lilian and Dahlia's mother, but I appreciate the way she has turned out; I would love to see her meeting Dwayne, in a one on one situation, the interogation she would give him would be hiralious! Loved Lilian's uneasiness with Dahlia in labour, parking lot of the hospital that was great .. tied in with 'latina' well!
excellent work girls!
| BornThisWay 10/27/06 . chapter 11
oh well that was .. fluffy lol .. fluffly, but enthralling! A hurricane is an interesting interlude, and i just KNOW there is a reason they are on their way to tennessee .. and I'm intrigued as to what it is! I was relieved in a way to see this chapter, the lines had gone quiet lol and I didn't know where you girls were lol i missed you
anyway, on with a serious review. It's good to see the relationship progressing smoothly, and I'm now quite curious as to where this story is heading .. I'm waiting for the central objective to pop up lol, and I'll be excited to see the turn. I know you guys have something planned no doubt, and I love the way that everything can be simplified and dramatic without everything being made into a emotional overload .. and i'm well aware that this review makes very little sense lol, so I'll get to the point. Regardless of what you guys write, I always seem to find some inspiration within the chapter. Whether it be a line or just a place, it always seems to trigger something and it is very much appreciated!
I thoroughly enjoyed the 'silent treatment' .. that would have to been my favourite bit in this chapter and really got the wheels turning, so to speak! great work girls, and it's great to have you back!
| Pinayprincesa 10/26/06 . chapter 11
Aw How Adorable! _ _
| punkydiva17 10/25/06 . chapter 11
Wow - a hurricane? That's kind of a twist. A cool twist though. Creative chapter. Keep up the good work!