Hey :) It's been an honor to Beta this for you! I really have enjoyed it and I'm glad you have enjoyed writing it :) Well done my friend! Continue writing ;)

Tara x0x

Hey :) sorry I got to this later than I thought I would *Cries* I have no time to do anything lately. You already know I like this and I'm glad you were able to take on board what I said and not freak out too much! I really do think you are improving and I think you have done well with the brothers dynamics and your pacing is good. I hoped you wouldnt get too scared with all the rest but really? the things I corrected the most was jst the parts that were wrong due to English not being your first language so that said i'd say your doing really really well :D Im stoked you got this up ... i cant wait for more and I'm not just saying that :D

Tara x0x

Sorry for taking so long in reviewing. BUsy busy busy lol BUT I'm finally here and thats what counts huh :)

I liked this chapter. He have mutany in the bad guy ranks and our foursome still trapped within the room. You're right Dean allowing himself to be cared for doesnt mean anything good coz usually he is mister stoic hehe

Looking forward to the next chapter
Tara x0x

Hey Evy

I'm really glad i could help you out with this. I really do like this story and i think it gets better with every chapter :) I'm very interested to see how you get them out of this one :)

Thanks for sharing and allowing me the chnace to help you out with it.

Tara x0x

Hey :) Sorry I didnt answer you email yet. I didnt have much of a chance at work today but I was thinking about it and asked my friend her opinion on it to ... but i'll shup up about that and answer your email in a minute

I was pleasantly suprised to see a new chapter from you :) I wasnt sure when you were going to get to it and dont worry about taking too long ... im not one to talk with the way i have been posting lately hehe

I'm glad that Dean and Amy are safe for now(aside from their injuries that is) The Hurt!Dean is always a very welcomed thing hehe. Good thing that Amy was able to connect with her brother. Hopefully it might make it easier for Jesse and Sam to find them:)

Good Job :)

Tara x0x

LovinJackson tossed this story my way, told me to check it out. You've got some really good ideas here, and I can tell you've thought through what you'd like to have happen. I've learned something very valuable writing fanfic -- the only way to improve is just to keep writing. Keep telling stories. As you absorbe the feedback other writers offer you (deciding for yourself if it's something you're willing to do or change), and as you keep writing what you see in your head, you will learn how to weave a tale that will enchant people, if only for a moment.

Writing fanfic has been fantastic fun for me -- and I can tell how much you enjoy this show, these characters, by the very fact that you're telling this story. Don't stop based on reviews -- the number of them or the content of them. If you believe in your heart that you are a storyteller, no amount (or lack of) reviews should change that.

There are ways to get help if you're being advised to do so -- I saw in some other reviews comments about grammar. I know several people who are fantastic beta's. Sometimes having a good beta that you can learn from (see what they change and what they suggest and take that into account as you write your next chapter) makes all the difference.

One other suggestion I have is to make this seem less like a story, and more like it is *actually* happening. You can do that by focusing on tense -- showing the action rather than telling about it.

Feel free to ignore me (many people do). Writing is very personal, and someone else's opinion about your writing is simply that -- an opinion. It doesn't mean anything more than you let it mean. And like I said, you have some good ideas with this story. If it's gripping you, continue it! I know I can't shake a story when it grabs hold...

:) I'll tag an alert to this to see how things turn out.

Hey there

I would have read this earlier but I had t make a delivery so i thought i would wait until i got back when i could concentrate :) This was a good update and you know i'm not gonna complain you having a hurt Dean hehe. I hope Sam and Jesse find them soon :) Good job :)

Tara x0x

Yay Sam and Jesse to the rescue. Good chapter. Sam ... ever the protector :) spot on :)

Cant wait for more :)

Tara x0x

Hey there :)

Yes i finaly got chance to read the rest of this story :)It's good. I like the story line and you now have me intrigued as to what is going to happen next :)

Tara x0x

Heh. Amy is frustrating. Or is she not doing that on purpose? Sam better find them, grr...

J

I think you've got a cool story here. You're doing a great job, but make just watch out for those little grammar errors. But on the other hand, wouldn't mind seeing the third chap!

J

love it so far girl!Update soon:)

Good and clean, the grammar could use a little poloshinig up but hay whose doesn't? Great work