It was good, I wish It was longer but it was good!

Aw, what a cute story! I really like the plot especially with Q involved. I so wish this actually happened in the show or in another movie! Anyways, this was really well-written. Fantastic job!

**applause** You have no idea how long I've been waiting (2 years?) for this. I was so concerned you'd been annoyed into giving it up! Well done.

it is a good story, simple, but good...
I appreciate the happy end.
Q seems too good , isn't it true?

I love this story, this is just my opieon and all but: I like how you make Q in this story. What he says and etc. Please coutine this :)

I like this. Please continue! Don't abandon it! Come back!

Damn that Q. Kevin Joe Bays is a lonely man with no life trying to get a reaction from you, don't listen to him. I like your story. I want to know how it ends. I would love for you to finish it.

that story is great, please continue it.
I want to know what is going to happen.
Thanks for writing it.

Hi.

I find your story works well on a number of levels and you are quite right, whoever that obsessive guy is he needs lighten up. The key word here is FICTION and it is meant to be fun and creative. These people and things are not REAL and therefore nobody has the absolute knowledge of what they "would" or "should" do! I imagine crossovers drive him over the edge.

Your narrative and dialogue are very good. Keep it up, I'd like to see what happens next.

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Oh well, it wasn't the worst story I've read in a while, though I think with some effort, it could be decent.

The trouble with Q is how to use him without over using him. After all, he's able to do anything, but that'd ruin the story if he did. So far, so good I suppose, but why would he bring Data back no matter what she does?

I'm afraid I've lost interest in the direction of this story. It's not that it's a bad plot, but you're rushing it way to much. Not to mention, how could Data end up on this planet? I hate to say it, but the blast he was hit by would've done a real number on him, not to mention what sky diving from orbit would probably have done to him.

I'm gonna read one more chapter (as that's all there is left to read).

Sorry if my review upsets you. Please take my words as a challenge to do better next time.

So this ship shows up out of no where, fires on them, then instead of finishing them off, retreats? Am I reading that correctly?

Ok, so they're orbiting an alien world for repairs after being attacked (and presuably, they could be under attack once more) and suddenly the councilor is requesting to leave? How exactly does this person think it's getting off the ship in a crisis?

The admirals final speech was... inspiring? no that's not the word. Valley girl-ish? that fits a bit more. She can't be bothered with an offical run down? Not that I think the crew of the Enterprise would need such a thing, it's just if you're gonna bother rehashing something, do it right.

I'm seeing a disturbing trend in this story to ignore what is possible for the sheer sake of having it happen. Please go back and remember where your characters are and keep the flow constant. That means attacking ships have to be dealt with before they're safe to do repairs and ship coucilors have to wait till they're back in Federation space before telling the Admiral they're getting married.

I feel the need to mention that there is more then one holodeck on the Enterprise.

Also, I found Geordi 'teaching' the Admiral about engineering to be a little out of place. I think you should consider if this scene was really required and if not, remove it.

I'm confused. I don't recall reading in the story that she lied to anyone about being married. Also, I'm not sure what business it would be of the councils if she was or wasn't married. Not to mention, why would he suggest that she take the Enterprise? What is he thinking she'll do with it? And if she really wanted it, wouldn't her rank be more then enough to force control of the ship to her?

Data's room is not a holodeck and there fore can not place nails in the wall upon command. Nor do I think nails would be used for hanging paintings. Granted, I don't know exactly what would be used.

Other then this weak moment, the rest of the story continues as strong as the first. I still doubt the sudden connection between Data and Hayes, but it's your story. Hopefully you'll find some time to elaberate on why these two crazy kids would tie the knot.

While the story is well written so far, I'm not sure I feel the same way about the plot. Data getting married? I'm not saying he wouldn't ever attempt such a thing, but it seems weak to suggest that he'd do so in only a few days time, then keep it a secret.

I do plan to read the next few chapters at least before I decide one way or the other. Have a lovely day.