This is cool! I really like the pairing.

cute

=^.^=

Hm well I was kind of skeptical at first, but it was a good little writing. Can't say much about the length of it, but good job anyway

Interesting choice of pairing...though, once one thinks about it, it's actually the most canon one in the show. Nice job writing from the computer's viewpoint!

Very high quality work. I feel that it is vastly under appreciated.

*chuckles* Do you have any idea how long I have waited for this to come out? And believe me, unlike those other fanfics with unlikely couples that I came to adore, I was not at all disappointed with this piece :)

My dear sweet JESUS! I LOVE this!

Very strong, very short piece. Recommend you look for some site that does flash fiction to submit it - I dont' knwo what the wordcount is, but I think you qualify. (I think you should do flash fic in any case.)

OTOH, I'd also like you to expand the themes you have here.
e.g. "First, he cannot tell that I have my own personality. I am willing to do everything for him."

That is a fantastic theme - How do you tell the difference between love and the lack of personality. I think you're a strong enough writer to take that out of fanfic and write that as a story all its own, and I think it would sell. (I can think of two markets immediately).

The second theme isn't as strong... somewhat rooted in the Dexterverse, and therefore less applicable.
He would dissect me. Open me up, see how I work. To refrain from causing me any confusion, he would shut me down (this action being both merciful and cruel), and then see how I tick. And I would not be able to see him or help him. For even though I care for him and I unhesitantly serve him for his feelings, I am a machine, and I wish to obey. That is my purpose.

There is a story by IIRC K. Laumer, Death before Dishonor, which deals with this. But his is written for the smile. I think you've got the germ of a story in the above quote that would be fascinating.

What happens when the first machine realizes that it could pass the Turing Test, but is confronted with the fact that to fulfill the primary programming (pass the turing test) is in conflict with self-preservation? Can one lie to preserve one's life? Is honor more important than death? Can one convert to Islam under the gun? (OK - that last crept in, but I'm not denyin git is relevant).

You go girl!

aw...i love it...DO MORE! i may be a teen, but i love DL! i think its impossible to outgrow! lol