Very nice section on Ghasta and his skills. Just a couple of minor stylistic things with phrasing, but it didn't detract from the story. The characters are well thought out and bring a lot of life to the tale.

I am really enjoying how the Sith Triumverate is unfolding as well as your take on Revan's personality and motivations.

The background into the Academy, Jorak, and Uthar adds a lot of depth to the story.

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Good start. I like the tension that plays out between Revan and Malak and your other characters are very interesting. I think I've read some of your writing before too.

you could intorduce kreia nihlus and sion or something

wow. update soon, and i always wondered about the half face mask and metalic voice. i like your version to it.

Nice

Hope we get to these 3 in the main story soon

Nice side story...very interesting. I'm willing to bet Revan remembers none of this in the main...and I wonder what happened to Volcanus, Entropi and Ghasta...

-Uberscribe

good side story i liked it...well ill cya

That adds a lot to the story main. Does Revan remember this?