hm, how interesting.

I really like this! First of all, I like all of the mythological references and allusions. I think it helps add weight and depth to the theme. I also really like how 1) Malfoy's thoughts are very punchy and dark; almost like he can't maintain a single thought for too long. He has to get his thoughts out quick. I especially like this, almost lyrical passage:

For centuries, the Malfoy name...

I am cursed.

It is ironic.

For the longest time, dragons are known...

I am not brave.

I am not strong.

Then the narrative changes with Hermoine (which I also like; yin and yang and all that), showing her thoughts to be more... regular. Her thoughts are not as angry/self-pitying, but also the narrative is how a narrative is normally written, showing that the character is, well, in a normal state of mind. She has some punching lines, but it highlights how she is empathizing with her patient:

A chance to redeem oneself.

A chance to change.

A chance to live again without guilt...

'Good and evil.

Life and death.

Constructive and destructive.

Light and dark.

Ying and yang.'

this was the bets bit. i remeber writing sumthin like this in a story i wrote in skl 4 english. it was bout my self-conscience and i added the whole 'ying yang' theory. (which i titally think is tru).
and how is draco malfoy insane??
ur way of writing is effective.
i like it! 8P

It's..real nice...wow...good job,girl...

ooh! I love it so far!

i like this...it's definetely different than what I've read before. but it's VERY well written, your style is marvelous. only criticism is that you sometimes jump tenses, but it wasn't a huge problem, it's just a little incoherent. update soon!

This is extremely interesting! Nice work. For some reason, every time I write for Draco, he goes a bit nuts...go figure. Keep writing.