GAH! I wrote you this large beautiful review and then closed it because i'm an idiot!!

So let's see if i can summarize. I was very impressed. The pacing was very good. I like your writing style. Your sentence structure and vocabulary made everything vivid and easy to follow. Your plot was fantastically intricate and amazingly tied up at the end! It remained interesting throughout. I take my hat off to you, you are a far better writer than i. And i'm jealous. But i didn't say that, so you don't know it.

I do have a few picky details of a critique for you. First, I am unclear about whether Venus and Kunz ended up together. I thought kunz said that she was mad at him for the Katrina push away thing because he said something about how at least truth was keeping them apart this time. But then they teased her about a boyfriend. So I am just confused in the end.

Also whatever happened to wrapping up Mako & Jad? They deserve some kind of ending don't they?! I didn't read anything about any sorta ending on their behalf.

To be picky, i have to step out on the balcony here and say... what do you mean after all that nephrite ended up with RIN!?!?!? I mean it makes sense but GAH!

Okay a little better. I did also want to talk to you about this whole Katrina end. It made sense why she had to die. I won't debate you on that point. I think it was masterful how you did it even. However, the part where Kunz had to explain, was a little inconsistent with the fact that the Senshi were allegedly conscious of all that was going on around them because Katrina saw and even spoke the the venus senshi several times. She would have at least seen her, even if not totally understood. That is what you said about them right? That they might be able to hear all that was going on? Maybe i misunderstood.

And my final critique is that, and I'm sorry for being so brutally honest, but you got a little lazy toward the end. The pacing and the labelling of the last two chapters was... different than the rest. And I still love this story, but I was disappointed in the end. After all this time, she just raised her crystal like normal and suddenly changed the whole world without any effort? You had such details about her using the crystal before and this time, nothing! And after so long being under Beryl's power and supporting her power and the Earth, he was defeated by her just touching him? Like really? o.o

I was hoping for a little bit of a struggle. I thought Beryl would put more of a fight. Didn't she learn anything this time around? And his powers were so pathetic to be defeated at just a touch. I was just so unsatisfied with that. After your setup of the blackening crystal and dying roses, I was just expecting more.

For some reason i thought that you were going to have Usagi use the crystal with Chibi-usa in her belly. That would explain the pink hair and how much her power was amplified to purify the world. It would also explain how special chibi was.

i was also hoping that Mamo would have to go through some struggle to break free. Maybe it should have been him to heal the palace since it had been holding it up all those years.

But, i must add that i loved what you did with pluto! i have a story exploring alot of what you did and really like some of the ways you explained things. i was a little impatient with her poofing in and out a billion times. If you were to redo it, i would make sure to flesh that out a bit. Especially since your epilogue isn't really an epilogue, its a whole nuther chapter!

i can't wait to talk to you about my plot and improving it, especially after reading this! Though now i'm even more embarrassed that you read what i sent :P

Hey. Wow. I am going to say, I'm not a fan of the switch of the senshi/shitennou that you did. At least Mina and Kunz are the same.

Still reading... more later.

You know... in my brain it says "you're taking things way too fast" but somehow... reading it. It seems just right. That is magic!

You even got me to cry a little. Good job.

I'd just like to say that you did a wonderful job with this story. It was compelling, interesting, and spun a very believable tale about the creation of Crystal Tokyo.

On another note, I'm also enjoying Savéol very much. Looking forward to more from you.

Wow this story was so good. i know its kinda old and has been complete for a while, but i stumbled across it somehow and i am so glad i did. You are so talented as a writer, keep it up!

Amazing story! Great job!

I noticed a lot of people mentioning this story on message boards, so I had to check it out and see what everyone was talking about. I have to say - this was really one of the best stories I've read. The plot was amazing and the whole Minako thing - DID NOT (repeat DID NOT) see that coming.

Looking forward to future stories your promised in your author's notes!

It will be impossible to comment about everything that was read. There are so many chapters that allowed us to just visualize and "see" a world we wouldn't expect in the Sailor Moon Universe, or in the normal romance world we are used to. It has strength and like you said raised a lot of questions as "time is like a river" and we never know which way it will run. Not everything is written in stone when human mind and emotions play a vital part in the choices we make.

Translation:I loved it. Just had to ramble a bit! (sorry about that) You got me into a philosophy mood!...

O, I get it: if *everybody* who was on the Moon that day got sent forward... *Beryl* was on the Moon that day, too! And so was her army. Yikes! GIGO principal in action yet again.

man it took me 6 days to finish but i enjoyed every bit of the story. i am thinking that pluto did wrong messing with the time line but she also save the time line and all her friends by doing this. i am glad she interfered when rini first came to her. because if not they would probably not have the future they have now.

keep up the good work cant wait to read more of your stories in the future.

out of all the little info that the shows gave on crystal tokyo i acctually think that is how it may have really happened. enjoying the story very much.

awesome story. but why did you put nephrite with rei? and jedite with lita? i think they are cuter when they where with ther original soul mate.

i loved it! it was very well written and planned out. i cant wait to read some of ur other stories.

i'm sorry but i get NOTHING of what's going on! :(

i LOVE the part about the rose pedals and that but i'm afreid i'm just to confused.

I liked it alot...other than the fact that I was completely and utterly confused after the chapter with the battle...cuz it just goes on...not even mentioning the battle for a while. But other than that, after I got to the start of the explination, it was good!