aw, that was so sweet. i felt so warm and fuzzy on the inside...especially on the last part ;)

nice story, I really love the Uchiha kids!
keep up the good work!

Ah! I love it, it's so sweet

very good! i love it!
i was tearing!:_(

Haha, poor little Keiji, I could so see him thinking they were killing each other. Cute!

Wow .. at first it was soo sad but then that part with Sasuke confessing his love happened and I was like "Yay!!" .. LOL great story ..keep up the work ^.^

KAWAInes lol

Amazing story!

It was good, and so sweet. but with Seiko... you first introduced Seiko as a girl, then you said it was a boy. haha i'm confused... anyway... GOOD JOB!!

"The kids couldn’t sleep all night, because of the moaning and screams that came from the other room."

All Uchiha Children: O_o

Kid #1: ZOMFG!! MY VIRGIN EARS!! >o<

Kid #2: KILL IT! KILL IT!

Kid #3: WTF?! Is Daddy killing Mommy?

Eldest Child: Err... no, he's just... teaching her a... wrestling move! Yeah! But, from behind her. And with no clothes on.

... *moaning continues in backgroud*

O__O Um... ew. DAD! KEEP YOUR PANTS ON, FOR CHRIST'S SAKE; YOU HAVE SEVEN KIDS ALREADY!

Kid #4: *grabs pistol* GAHH! I DON'T WANT TO LIVE IN A WORLD WITH SUCH TAINTED EYES OF MINE!! Goodbye, cruel world!

LOL!! :D Well, I liked it. Good work!

*BANG!*

Err... ouch. O__O My bad.

OMG OMG OMG


i loved it! one of the best stories i have EVER read.

keep writing please cause i can tell that you are going to become an accomplished writer one day!

Great story I really liked the ending their kids are perverts.

that was soo cute!

=)

I'm not much of a Sasuke/Sakura shipper but...this was probably one of the best stories that I've read.

Sweet! 5 stars to ya!
~Sayuri

Well, this is rather interesting. Okay, I would like to point out a few things for you, and I hope you don't think that I'm rude. I'll be blunt: I think you need a beta. A really good one, and preferably someone you don't know, because they're harsher. Oh, and if you've improved since this fic, which I just noticed was written over a year ago, please ignore this, unless you are aiming to rewrite this story.

Because you apparently don't have one, though, I'll point a few things out. Your formatting is a bit off. I don't know why you have little dashes before all your quotes, but I think it takes away from the general flow of the story. Also, you have people like me who actually care and are now wondering why it looks like a list.

Also, if you follow canon and say that Sasuke and Sakura got together around, say, twenty - which gives them two to four years from now for Sasuke to return and everyone to get happy - and they have a twenty-two year old son, then you are also saying that they are relearning how to love at over forty. I think you said forty-three? While I understand that, perhaps, people are having sex at over forty I would like to think that they are conscientous enough not to do it where their children can hear them.

In addition to this, there are a few small grammatical issues. First of all, numbers under one hundred or which contain fewer than three syllables should always be spelled out, and especially ages. It disrupts the flow of the story and the general "look" and "feel" of the piece if they are not. Also, you are missing a few commas here and there.

You also spend a bit too much time describing the characters in list format. I understand your desire to illustrate your characters, so to speak, but the list format is very awkward in a story, and tends not to be the best. If you were, for example, to fabricate a few scenes that show the characters and appearances of your original characters, it would be much better writing, and would also make them seem less like Mary Sues, which some of the characters seem like: after all, you say that the children are all beautiful, highly intelligent, and kind.

Still, I really like the section in italics, and I think the concept you were working with was very nice, if a bit cliche and overused.

Good job, and keep working.