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| Coco-Minu 2008-03-10 ch 1,  | abuseRawr, ShikaIno is great! This was great in the subteality of itself, the light hidden moments. :) |
| darklace15 2008-01-06 ch 1, | abuseI like the idea of Tenten being a mommy...it's cute. Good one. :D |
| floatingonair 2007-10-28 ch 1, | abuse(what the hell, brain? I don't even like Shikamaru/Ino...) Hahaahhaahahahaha! That cracked me up! I love Tenten as a big sister... |
| shadowsinfire 2007-08-31 ch 1, | abuseI love your characterisation of Shikamaru. Not just in this; in all of your fics. Actually, I love all of your fics full stop. I found it was more Shika/Tenten than Shika/Ino. Or otherwise purely platonic. I guess it's all just a matter of interpretting subtext and I'm not a Shika/Ino fan either ^_^ |
| naash 2007-01-20 ch 1, | abuseahh that was good. very pensive |
| Sapphire Luna 2006-12-01 ch 1, | abuseI liked this =) Nothing else to say XD |
| Katterree Fengari 2006-10-25 ch 1, | abuseOh, cute Tenten treating Shika like a little brother! After he loses the little sachet in the dark, you don’t really bring it back into the fic...even though it seems like a theme. Also, I think you mention the amputate joke once too much. I like how you draw other characters in, and touch on Shikamaru’s distaste for war. I recall the “‘don’t be a baby’” line from “Of Goats and Explosions |
| Mistr3ss 2006-09-10 ch 1, | abuseThis looks rater... incomplete. It's really just an oneshot? Looks more like a prologue, or an introduction on a multi chapter fic. Still, I like it. The caracthers weren't OOC, and the idea is great. I support a second chapater, or another oneshot, like a sequel. |
| Falconfire 2006-09-03 ch 1, | abuseHmm...you should continue this. Just one more chapter, to emphasize the ShikaIno. I really like the way you implied love with that one sentence from Shikamaru to Ino. If you could write another chapter like that, it'd be awesome. Overall, your writing skills are wonderful, but your plot (for this story) is slightly mediocre. (Don't hit me!) This seems more like an intro than a oneshot, you know? But whatever, really. |
| Riana1 2006-09-03 ch 1, | abuseYou have a strong Shikamaru voice. I find he is one of the more difficult characters to do. |
| IntertwinedxDestinies 2006-09-03 ch 1, | abuseNice! |
| JA-Japster 2006-09-02 ch 1, | abuseNeat! Great vivid descriptions help create an immersive and realistic setting! Enjoyed your first chapter; I'm interested to see what you do with it next. Hopefully more war and killing and stuff -you seem to have a real knack for it! |
| tlq 2006-09-02 ch 1, anon. | abusevery cute; subtle shik/ino |
| JrEMPRESSofDrkness 2006-09-02 ch 1, | abuseawh, this is so adorable. |