Bleck I'm not very fond of Boreas.

Can't you just like.. Kill him off already?

D:

Very cute chapter, I enjoyed reading it.

Yay for plot development! I hope things start getting better between Lavinia and Orion now. I look forward to reading the next chapter.

This chapter was very relaxed compared to your other chapters, which was nice for a transition to a point where Lavina and Orion will be talking again (or at least, I assume that's what the chapter is for). I'm interested to see where you're taking this story. Can't wait for your next chapter.

See ya, or not!

I'm really enjoying this story so far. Keep up the good work, I can't wait to find out what happens next.

I'm really enjoying all the plot twists in this story. Boreas is quite a slimy character; I wonder what he's hiding?

I remember reading the first few chapter of this a couple of years back, and today I decided to re-read it. I'm ejoying it just as much as I did this first time and I plan to continue reading it tomorrow.

It's interesting how they (they being Orion and Lavina) both notice the other's problem more easily than they notice their own, and very realistic. The fact that Orion doesn't just ignore his problems (like Lavina), but he flat out doesn't regonize him makes him more interesting. And, on the ignoring problems note, that is a great thing for Lavina to have issues with, given how common a problem it is.

You did make this chapter more contemplative, especially on Lavina's end. And that contemplation makes Lavina a more relatible character, and thus more realistic (at least for me).

I, very oddly, find myself liking Carrow. However, I do wish there would be more character devolpment on her end (or perhaps my liking her is why I think this). Or, if you both wish to keep her as a background character, then she's fine as she is (and entertaining).

Overall, I think this is a very well-written chapter.

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I liked this. I really did. However, Lavinia seems so tempermental. I don't know, I just supose that were it me, I would be a lot quieter if I were guilt ridden. But, that might just be me.

I can't wait to see where you're taking this. Is it going to Argentina? Because you've mentioned multiple times how there's trouble there, and how Roshenkov was there.

Just curious.

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Do i hear my name in the beginning chapter note? ) and im glad its still continuing

ive noticed that for Hp fics, in general, the girls get all messed up, and the guys r lonely. P

nice job, but this chapter is kinda slow and doesnt really go very far in my opinion.

Well, you got me hooked. I got to chapter 36 and hit the next button... to realize there was no next button. and then i got up and had a "NO" moment worthy of George Lucas. (i read thru this whole story all of today.)

Your story is very endearing and rather unique. Its fresh and intrigue-full.

Yaxley tho if i recall is a Death Eater blowing up Hogwarts students in the 7th book. Or ... somewhere. beginning of it maybe? Anyways what Im saying is, isnt he a death eater?

Still, i ignored that, cuz this story is fun. ) i need more.

Please continue or ill be rather messed up.

Aspy

Haha. Thanks, makes me almost wish I had a page here so I could help you out with that.

I think Carrow is intensly interesting personally, and I'm wondering about her motives to visit Lavina. I also think Mrs. Wright is a cute old lady, that whole forcing a biscuit on Orion was a funny little scene to think about.

I'm interested to hear about the accident (Larson's too, but mainly the one Lavina was involved in). So, Chiverston was caught and Lavina is refusing to play? Well, if she's so upset someone got hurt right? Or something. I'm very curious and I think you guys did that scene exceptionally well (what, with not writing about it and having Carrow reveal it).

You've definetly improved using your tenses. I think you got it all in present tense, so brava to you both.

Every once in a while there's a little error, but it's the kind of error you find in every work, no matter the author, so that's great!

I hope you both continue to write (and special thanks to rareb who apparently forced this story to continue).

See ya, or not!

Wow, different punctuation? That's interesting. I never knew. I wonder if when I write in different languages I annoy people? Hm.

Anyway, thank you for writing another chapter! When I checked you page today I was so happy to see this story had a new chapter! (Even though, honestly, I should be working on homework. ") I like to read, and this makes me very happy. Well, obviously not happy when I'm reading the depressing stuff, but, er, you know. I'm happy that I get to read another chapter. And a thank you to you guys for putting this up on the web! 'Tis very nice of you to share your work with those who like to read it.

On another note, I like Carrow as a character. I was almost disapointed that Orion got her life's story out of her so easily, but that's only a minor feeling here.

Oh, and there's still a slight problem with tenses, and there's also a problem with plural and singular verbs. For example; when you say that someone likes "these things" make sure you don't mean "the things." I know it's a minor thing, but it does make a difference. But, again, it's a minor thing and I'm sure I'm the only one who noticed it (because I'm insane like that). Anyway, this chapter was generally correct in the grammer area.

Thank you once again for writing this! I hope you continue to.

See ya, or not!

I don't usually really care for Harry Potter stuff, but only because I think things are overdone and such. But, you two have got a good base here. It's interesting. I mean, all that witch stuff isn't really that necessary for your story, but its fanfiction so I get it. I like it though, it's something to read (obviously). There are a lot of conventional errors though. Also, watch your tenses. I can't see any holes in the story so far, and I hope you continue it, if only so I could find a hole in it.

Oh, and this kept getting on my nerves:

When you have someone talking, the comma comes inside of the quotation marks.

For example:

"I want a hamburger," she said.

Or if you have a question it goes like this:

"Do they serve hamburgers here?" he asked.

same with exclamation points and etcetera.

Whenever you update next, just ask me if you need any more information on the stuff (conventions). I'll likely help out in any way I can. (Now watch this review be riddled with conventional errors. ")

Anywho, yeah. Please write more.

See ya, or not!

I KNEW IT! Boreas, that bastard! Finally idiotically-in-love Lavinia has seen the light! I should have known Lucinda was a Death Eater, the last name struck me as familiar...*facepalm*