T_T this is sad...my eyes were kinda wet you know

Demyx's appearance felt a little random to me. I liked the story though. Poor Axel will never be able to live with himself will he?

aww great job
i'm not a HUGE fan of this couple, but i do like them ^__^

people always criticize "dark", but I think its much more visual and demanding of a viewer, so don't worry about it, i liked

although I am trying to write lighter stuff, just cause I've got crappy stuff going on in real life right now and my sister who reads my stuff is concerned about my mental health XD she doesn't get that art forms are often exaggerations or capturing of fleeting emotions

great job, very well written
... I really loved this, best Larxel I've read

YOU ARE SO MEAN! I MEAN COMMON!POOR LARXENE AND GUESS WHAT? YOU DIDN'T EVEN LET THEM KISS! THAT WOULD SATISFY ME! BUT YOU DIDN'T! NOW YOUR GONNA HAVE TO DO ANOTHER SEQUEL CAUSE I AIN'T SATISFY WITH SAD ENDINGS!

So sad!

Love it! I was actually crying while reading this (something that I almost never do) Keep up good work :)

Oh.My.God.
That was sad...but I like the way you write the story. Good grammar. Good spelling. Overall, I liked it in the way you wrote it.