 GDeacur 2006-09-05 . chapter 1I liked the use of contrast between the opening and closing lines. Good writing skills in general - no grammar or spelling errors jumped out and hit me in the forehead.
I assume the "Animals who could secretly be humans" line was a reference to Beast Boy?
I do have a suggestion as well - that of avoiding vocabularic redundancy. The third time you used the word "hunt", it was getting stale so to speak. I would suggest using synonyms - stalk, track, pursue, or something of that sort.
All round, a good enough one shot. |