I've read this piece before, but I haven't reviewed, though I can't for the life of me think of why not. This is beyond excellent. The raw, easy lewdness of it - they are all fantastically in character, but your portrayal of Mugen is simply breathtaking. The dialogue is stunning in its frankness, vicious in its humanity. The description of watching the mens' ankles while waiting for a ** is particularly vivid - and you manage the sugar metaphor beautifully. In the end, you actually manage to make it -right- but most importantly believable and chest-scraping that Mugen doesn't ** her.

Really and truly, this is an amazing piece. Brilliant work.

So I enjoyed the character interaction and relationships. Mugen was as cryptic as always, which is always oddly ironic considering how blunt and coarse he is.

i know i've given you like a million reviews today...but i don't care! i had the day off, and it's not every day you get to do whatever you want to do, and i wanted to read awesome fanfiction. thanks for another awesome effin' story. love fuu/mugen, especially your take. muy bueno!

"He guessed he was in love with her or something." that was by far my favorite part.

I read this piece a long time ago and I loved it then but unfortunately I never took the time to review. So please accept this belated offering.

It has lost none of its impact the second time around. Your grasp of the characters, and Mugen in particular is so spot on:

"He was about to ** her, he knew. And when he did, he’d be ** that restaurant guy just as much. And that merchant with the caravan, and his ugly daughter. He’d be ** Mukuro, and Kohza, and the governor who ruled that hell where they all grew up. With his dick in Fuu’s **, he’d also be sticking it to Jin and his impeccable breeding and those barely hidden looks of disgust on his face.

And that was just too many people to ** when all he wanted was her."

If Mugen and Fuu ever happenened, it would be something like this. Wonderful, wonderful work. I will finally add it to my favourites, where it rightfully belongs.

Bob5

I really liked it! Your characterization was absolutely perfect.

very nice! well written and very in character!

Never has the B word made me laugh so much before. It's absolutely in character and pure gold.

I was setting myself up to be disappointed by another smutt scene, not that there's anything wrong with them. I, myself, enjoy reading lemon now and then but i really hate it when the writer puts an inappropriate lemon scene in the middle of a really great, sincere, heartful story so i'm so glad that you didn't do that. I love the ending, it's very sweet =).

Ya that was excellent nice job

I need hardly say this is excellent; different order of magnitude to most pieces on the site. It seems like you've selected the most effective line from a dozen fair ones, and all the character's actions and thoughts are efficient. Honest depiction of Mugen; with just as little sentimentality from him that makes it effective. It's hard to think of criticism; there's a lot of statements, not so much implication, but they're good statements. I'm going to enjoy reading this much stuff...

I LOVED it! Everyone stayed completely in character and it was amazing all the way to the end! YOU ROCK!

*faves!*

With its superb characterization and writing that manages to be both sexy and humorous, this love story is an absolute delight.

Oh, wow! This was so well written, I'm totally impressed with your characterisation and writing style! Awesome job; favorited for sure!

Damn that was good. Loved the ending, you kept me interested the whole way through.