 Madm05 2007-04-18 . chapter 1This is fantastic! I have to say, I'm relatively new to CSI fan fiction, but of the stories I've read already, you are by far one of the best authors. I commend you on a job well done.
I also have to say tht I would be very much interested in seeing a companion piece of sorts. You did a wonderful job with this story, with describing life for Grissom as a kid and following him through his life (the ending was an especially nice touch). I would really like for you to do the same with Sara. You gave hints that you felt life was more difficult for Sara than we see in the series, but you never said what may have happened. It's just a thought, but I would really like to see your version of what life was like for young Sara, just as you did for young Grissom.
Regardless, you are a very talented writer. Myself, I'm off to read more of your work. Wonderful work again, and I do hope you'll write more.
Cheers,
Madm_05 |
 Maeve Morgan 2006-11-14 . chapter 1Oh, dear God! I think you just broke my jaw with this story because I've had my mouth open for at least the last five minutes and I can't seem to close it!
Now, seriously, I was not even halfway through this story when I decided I already loved it. It was beautifully done, and I can't help but eagerly wait for more drug-induced pieces like this one. Hey, apparently meds work for something else other than healing an illness.
I actually can't believe I've been reading this for over an hour. I completely lost track of time. The very way this story started was simply great because you proved such an insight to the character of Gil Grissom with just the first few lines that I was instantly captivated.
It was amazing and I'm in awe with how you've woven every bit of detail we know about Grissom into this. His thought processes were astoundingly Grissomian, and I loved how you painted his childhood and how the changes brought by his father's death altered his life. I swear, there was some point when I was thinking 'I wonder if such thing will be mentioned', and then I'd find it a few paragraphs later.
You remained truthful to the series and its storyline with the added bonus of your interpretation of certain facts and scenes. I've literally just read years of their developing relationship, and I can't decide which part I like best. I'm a sucker for first encounters, and the beginning of their romantic relationship per se, and I loved those, everything in between, before, and afterwards.
This was obviously mainly GSR, and yet I'd grin to myself whenever some other aspect wandered into the storyline, i.e. their relationships with other people, be it in a romantic or professional, or either way, a personal level. The small mentions of Nick, Greg, Warrick, Catherine, and Brass, and everything that was happening around them; Hank, and Heather; and their cases and crime scenes. I got to say, I only missed Sofia, because I'd love to know how that would've worked out in your story.
But I especially loved how you worked Charlotte into it, because people often forget that Grissom wasn't originally as a secluded monk as he later became. I know he was always socially awkward and a workaholic, but becoming supervisor with the added toll of loosing his hearing really made him retreat into himself in later seasons (especially three and four, I think). In the beginning he was much more alive and (dare I say?) outgoing.
No real criticism regarding their secret affair, only curiosity as to what he said that caused the feud. But I have a pretty general idea of it, as Grissom can be such a jerk sometimes. Hopefully, he's gotten over this habit for good.
I was going to say I was a bit confused as to the existence of that scene break up there just before he got hit on the head, but of course its meaning became quite clear with the whole "Butterfly Effect" of the story. The moment Sara was attacked was when my jaw first dropped, but it was a bit 'oh dammit, I did not want to see that, even if I was expecting some sort of tragedy to happen'. And then, when Grissom got whacked in the head, and there was another scene break, and it segued with "Get an ambulance!", I didn't know if I should feel marveled at what you had pulled off, or slightly betrayed that I'd gone through that whole angst of seeing them dead, yet most of all I think I was ecstatic with the possibilities that opened up.
The changes in Grissom in that very last scene were just wonderful, and very well done. I finished reading and, as said above, I was still having trouble closing my mouth and working around all the words running through my mind. This was one of the best stories I've ever read, and definitely a great CSI oneshot.
I can't thank you enough for coming up with it and sharing it here online. You just got yourself another fan, as I'm sure there must be many others. I'm a bit ashamed to admit this wasn't the first piece of yours that I read, even if it is the first I'm reviewing. I promise to try not to be too lazy in the future, as I know authors greatly appreciate feedback.
Of course, I could've skipped this rather infinite rant and simply say, "Great job! Write more!", but that's just not my style, even if it summons up my thoughts pretty well. ;) |