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| Colormyworld 2008-08-14 ch 5,  | abuseInteresting...I enjoyed this (: |
| Double Spell 2008-08-01 ch 1, | abuse*~His not so favourite Aunt had decided to move to Japan for good after Jason broke up with her and moved away to Romania, meaning the Chinese proverbs were very common.~* -move to JAPAN for good? uh, Hong Kong is in CHINA which is why she uses CHINESE proverbs. if you had left out the "for good" it would have been fine, but having it there makes it seem as if she's there now and just decides to make it permanent. |
| hermit hideaway 2008-06-24 ch 5, | abuseGood story. It was fun to see Chris go through the different stages, especially baby Chris. The thing with the banana and demon tag was too cute. Plus I loved all of the Leo Chris bonding moments. Great job. |
| Meco-lia 2008-04-13 ch 5, | abusegood ending! shame about writters blaock though a sequal would have bene good |
| Meco-lia 2008-04-13 ch 3, | abuselmao!! lvoe this chapter loads! |
| Meco-lia 2008-04-13 ch 2, | abuseo whats wrong with chris |
| Meco-lia 2008-04-13 ch 1, | abusei love it, we lost paige... you did what lol! |
| SaphirePhoenix 2008-04-08 ch 5, | abuseyou should really continue this. it's wonderful, but the ending was too abrupt. |
| WishIWasAWitch 2007-10-27 ch 5, | abuseSequal! Sequal! Sequal! |
| Chiki-b 2007-10-12 ch 1, | abuseThis was a really good story. The part where Chris turned hippie was so funny that I started cracking up and everyone around looked at me like I was crazy. Anyways, I was wondering if there was going to be some sort of sequel to this. Please let me know either way. |
| cmtaylor531 2007-09-30 ch 5, | abuseAww I loved it! |
| shana 2007-09-22 ch 5, anon. | abuse"he had basically commented suicide the day he split him and Piper up". How do you comment suicide? And where is san fancisco park? Is it in Cafaornia? He re miteralized? Last time I checked, it's spelled r-e-m-a-t-e-r-a-l-i-z-e-d. |
| shana 2007-09-22 ch 4, anon. | abuse"skills that he learnt" - learned. joint them together? "joined" |
| shana 2007-09-22 ch 3, anon. | abuseDemons don't "rome" around they "roam" and again with the whilst. "White lose shirt on" - I believe you meant "loose" shirt. Are you going to say that Chris is loosing his mind too? Again, the typos are distracting and take away from the story because we are constantly trying to figure out what the heck you are trying to say. |
| Shana 2007-09-22 ch 2, anon. | abuseWill you stop with the freakin' whilst? It's while looking at Chris. Leo shock his head but - also you don't "shock" your head you shook or shake your head. And all proper names are ALWAYS capitalized. Didn't you learn anything in school? The typos and grammatical errors are distracting. If I was your teacher and you handed in a paper with all of errors, I'd fail you in a hearbeat. Fix the typos. |