This is by far the most intense Hands off! fic I read yet. I usually keep to the light and fluffy stuff.
I like this though, lots of emotions.

Wish to see more of it soon.

o so cute ...:)

...it can't be just a one shot *sniffle* oh well, I liked it alot! hurray for you! :D:D:D -The H-

That was funny. I would recommend periods, quotation marks, distance between people speaking, and a general clean-up of spelling. I liked the story, but it seemed fast and disorganized without these things. Please improve your...spacing...I suppose is the word. Put some space between the things ppl say to each other and things like that. If I haven't offended you beyond reconciliation yet, I offer to be your Beta-Reader until you can get the hang of it on your own. I see potential in your writing.
~Runa