Ah! The ultimate cliffhanger of doom! So Jak...he's only got Six measly months?! And we all know he's going to go fight, so that totally hacks down his time to like, weeks!! He can't die either, because that's just insane. :D I really like this story, seriously! It's definately changed in the last few chapter, but that's a good thing.
I LOVED the scene with Torn. ha ha. I actually think he made plenty of sense. I think Ashelin was just upset over the fact he had gotten a good idea before her. ;) And the scene with him and Ripp was good, too. When is he going to find out about what happened?? I hope he does.
And of course it would lead them to Karn instead- why the heck didn't I think of that?
...Perhaps the Marauders were really stupid enough to leave the keys in. XD He should have found them in the glove compartment, ha ha. And I must say, the idea with him unable to channel eco is very interesting. It's kind of weird without him having those voices in his head. And I don't think I've commented on them before, so I will say that I thought it was a good idea.
Great, great job so far. I hope you can get back to it after you finish AFRaT. ;D So keep it up!!

Hmm...the flaw in Keria's plan...would it be that after she's done reconfiguring everything- the becon would alert the Marauders that the Wastelanders are coming?? That's all I got. ;) And now I'm scared Karn is going to be unwillingily dragged into this. But I hope Keira and Sig bust in there and seriously kick some butt. :D
And thanks for answering my question- It makes me feel better, ha ha. It doesn't really bother me too much anymore, but I still take a little flak for it here and there.
Sorry, but this is all the time I have. I guess I'll just have to hold out on another cliffie. ;) I should've known. Great job. Can't wait for what's next!! :D

Yay! Light Jak! I was just abot to say, maybe he should have taken Karn into the Wasteland and turned into the Light form, just to show him he's not always that monster. and then they would have gone on a cute little fly over the desert. But that's too cute for you, and this is better than my idea. :D ha ha. A good chapter, loved Keira's concern over them. ;)

Good to know Jaky-boy's okay. And for some reason, I thought that Jinx bothering the hell out of Keria seemd pretty funny. ;) But all comedy aside, I hope Karn is compeletly okay, although I realize now that you're not done with this story, so perhaps I won't know just yet. ;D I loved the moment with Jak and Keira, as well as the one between Ripp and Jak- and is that how Mik and Ripp are similar again? The fact that Torn found the jewelery they refused to take off? If so, holy cow. ESP. O.o Awesome job so far!
And if I may ask one of my trademark questions...Do people (namely friends or family) make fun of you for writing J&D fic? Because I know that happens to me. ;) But I can't help it! The stories are irresistable to me- so much potential with so many cool characters to play around with. I mean, how can you not like writing about characters like Torn, Errol or Jak?? And if I'm ever bored, this universe is so much fun to play around in. :P Just wondering... I promise my next review will be free of this. ha ha.

Great chapters so far! I must say, the last one was pretty...dark. If you'll excuse the random pun...:D Oh my God! I hope Karn is okay- the little guy really got to me!
And it's kind of darkly funny how Torn's first reaction upon seeing his brother is that he punches him in the face? ha. But I guess that's Torn for you. ;) I must admit, Ashelin's real age compared with Torn is a little...whatever. Which is why I made them four years apart- it seems better that way. ;)
I'm so glad Torn and Ripp finally saw eachother!
But now Karn and Jak are severley wounded! They better get back to normal...
p.s. how does if feel to have like, 93 reviews? What do you do with all of them? :D

I'm serious when I say this story is really good. I think your characterization of Jak is pretty damn good. :D I have a hard enough time writing him, and you seem to have no probelm with it. That I envy you for. And holy crap about Errol coming into his cell and slicing 'Eco Freak' into his back! Oh my God...that's hardcore. O.o But it's definately a good character element and when Blade and Karn see it, (the only ones to see it I think) it's a good character moment. Like the first time he's able to tell anyone about it.
And nice little hinting with Blade and Torn. ;) He's not a failure! He's not! :D Great job, by the way. hee.
Alas, I have things to do now (Gr..) but I will check out this story again soon! Until then!

Oh yay! It's Ripp, I mean, it's Blade!! He's Ripp!! :D Oh man, Torn had better find out where his little brother is. If he doesn't, I'm going to be angry. ;) Nice touch having Ripp get Errol's tattoos in red- that would seem like something disrepectful. Although, why does he feel that way? Is it Errol's fault? Ah! What happened?!! Jeez...I really want to know!
I really like Karn and Jak's relationship- it's good that he's finally learning to actually speak with other people, y'know. I'm worried though- Dark keeps coming back. And what a serious jerk he is. ;D I want to know where all these people came from, and why would Ripp ever want to associate wiht them?!!Very interesting- I'm liking it so far! :D

I swear, you love those cliffhangers. :) I liked Jak heading into Dead Town- any story that includes the place is interesting to me. I thougth it was interesting how Jak didn't really want to speak while he was there...
And him finding his Uncle's journal was very interesting as well... I'm assuming that's going to come back up later?? And Cutlass- he's from the Erol story, isn't he?
Good chap so far- on to the next one!

It would be a cliffhanger, wouldn't it?? ha ha. I really like it so far, actually. And I'm not big on the Jak and Ashelin pairing,but you had them break up, so it's all good. ha ha. And I think Ashelin would be pretty understanding about it. I was really afriad for Keira though, because of what she said about Erol...Jeez. At least all Jak did was throw something at her. ;) I'll get back to the other chapters soon, but I've got a bunch of stuff to do today. And this will give me insentive to read it later. I do like Karn- he's not overly annoying, just 'little kid' annoying. :D Hope Torn comes back somehow in the story- Holding out for him. ha ha.
I'm interested!

PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE!

jak will make it though this...right?

Hey, I was just reading your truly terrific story when it occured to me that when Jak thinks : 'Oh, Mar' , it must weird him out a little because he is Mar. lol?

“Idiot,” he muttered, as he tilted his head back down.

“Who is?” Light Jak asked his host.

“I am,” Jak replied and there was silence on Light Jak’s part, however, Dark Jak felt the need to voice his opinion.



LOL! As soon as i read that last sentence I started laughing. I somehow knew Dark was gonna be an ass. I LOVE how you portray Dark Jak. *sighs* I wish this story was still going...

I really enjoy the storyline, but Jak just doesn't seem like Jak. i always thought of him as a person who didn't really say much, just short sentences and comments.

*pout* you haven't updated in a year or so! Please update soon! I want you to finish your story! Not leave us hanging.