i suppose this story is over but good work really good XD

wow good story so far please continue

Hey it's Amber!

Ok, I likes it, but I think that the individual paragraphcs needed to be longer. I really liked the story though!

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Why don't you just double skip?

Rush Rush Rush-

Slow it down! Words scrambling in head?

i have to agree with the first comment..more detail..but good ply..please cotinue!

*cheering* CONTINUE! CONTINUE! CONTINUE! Etc.

'Course I like it and you should continue, since you already promised an angsty ending. But can I make a few suggestions?

I like how you started it out, summarizing the brothers story in a few precise sentences. The rest flowed nicely, but a little too quickly. There wasn't much description and I'm addicted to that stuff. I don't have much else to say except that I like your writing style but if you could beef it up a little, then this story would one of the best.

Oh, and update soon! I'm waiting!