You have some wonderful vocabulary which you use extremely well. The story was simple, but nice. However, You could have slid a few chapters in together. Chapter 5, especially, was so short. That really surprised me.

Anyways, you still did a good job, just a few things I thought you should know.

LastCetra

Absolutely beautiful! Very well written and it truly touched my heart. Long live Clorith!

Awesome story! Loved it

Chapter 4 was very sad...like the part in the game.

The ending was very, very cute! Is that her spirit talking to him?

O, I like it very much! I'm a huge Clorith fan so you won't be hearing any bad things from me! ^_-

It's very short and sweet but I like those kinds of stories sometimes. I don't have any complaints about the way it's written 'cause you write very well!

I wonder whats going to happen next...