I love this story. Darn, and I thought I was being original with the female Sephy concept, oh God. Sorry, ignore that. The female Sephy type thing is cool. Reno! I love Reno, I wish I could pair him off with someone in my story. But I don't want to add Elena in it. Oh crap, I'm rambling, sorry. Great story and I can't wait for more chapters.

Hey Gahndi good story, it really grabed my attention. I really like the way you describe the features of the characters, very enchanting like. I also like the way you give the characters of the stories a little version of the past. The way you wrote the story has a very perfitional air to it and I should now I read a lot of books. Any How ya know what school I go to so,
I want that muffin chocolate chip is you please! thank and well done.

I like this story it came out really good . try putting in some fighting in it when seruma and kaurumen come in . you should add something like …um…oh I know
Cloud starts a fight. First when seruma and her sister come in cloud and the whole group tense up and cloud says something that degrades seruma …he states something like “you look like seproth but you seem inferior to him I can take you on note( he says this in fear)…seruma then goes …oh really lets see who messes up who in battle…..and…..