eh it's good, but it could be better, gotta add more story into it and emotion.

its OOC not OC. OC means "Own Character" and OOC means "Out Of Character

Kawaii! you have potentail! (sp?)
Ja ne!
~Me

Aw, that was so cute! I love the pairing Hinata/Naruto, they look so cute together! And you know they're going to fall in love with each other, in the end! :)

it was amazing please wright more

no part 2 you must have a part 2 *looking for papers in her head* there somewhere plz make or find a part 2 i love this small fic ^_^

Ohh! That is soo kawaii! I hope my bf just doesn't mess up like Naruto did... But yeah, two things:
1. Yes that is OC. Hinata's dad being NICE? Never gonna happen.

2. I think you meant "contemplating" instead of "contaminating", because contaminating means to dirty or make impure. Contemplating means to think over, as in:
"He sat contemplating the past evening's events."

That's all. =^.^=

The story was really good, but I think you shoud try to add more detail and desriptive words. You also had some spelling errors and used no puncuation. Also saying the phrase "I mean..." slows down the story and makes it complicated to read and really doesn't fit in a story very well. That's more a conversational phrase. I think you should also add more tension and supension in the story in places like the dinner scene instead of just breezing by it. All and all it was a very cute story. Keep practicing and I'm sure you'll improve.

That was pretty cool,i really really like Hinata and Naruto as a couple or whatever so I'm always looking for stories with them.

HAHAHAHAHAHA! I can't believe that Naruto would do that!

Great story! God bless!

Cute...

I liked it, I'm always a big fan of Naruto/Hinata fics, ive always wanted to see those two together. But keep it up, i like this one, its good.

very good