Ohh, this is very good and not confusing at all!
Then again I'm a generally confusing person, so it's probably why this makes sense to me.
But I still don't think it'd be confusing to anything else. ^^;
Anyway, I'm definitely going to keep reading!
This is very well written and definitely interesting!
=D

YAY! You continue =D
XD now that was much clearer than the last chapter~ (but that was also good to mirror Fay's confusion ^^)
I like it, even if that outburst from Shao was a tad OC and I wouldn't compare Rikuo to Sorata XD

Whe! You updated! *cheers* I was so happy when I saw this in my inbox ^^

As usual, it's nicely written. I reread the first chapter before reading this, and the contrast between broken!Fai and everyone else is... heartbreaking, I suppose. Wonderfully written, as always ^^ I -adored- your Kurogane, especially his reactions to Syaoran's handling of the situation. Skilled ninja he may be, Kuro-pon has no real idea how to handle a situation like this, and seeing him not panicking but glad for that one small piece of serenity is really, really nice.

Also, your description of Fai was just really neat, and I loved how you compared him to Sakura-chan later on. It really helped everything hit home.

Your spelling and grammar are good; it's refreshing compared to lots of other fanfiction.

The plot seems to be appearing now, which is great. I can't wait for Yuuko-chan's assessment of the situation. Again, an absolutely amazing chapter! Feel free to take your time with the next one, because this story is so amazing, I don't mind how long it takes ^^

Kazahaya and Rikuo! :D It is really interesting how much CLAMP integrates their separate stories, which certainly makes for some easy cross-overs! I'm glad you did that.
Yes, it certainly is still interesting and wonderful, though not as confusing as the first chapter . . . I'm really looking forward to where you are taking it! :)

Very good! Just writing what comes to mind is certaintly a good way to write about what someone else is thinking! For all that you say it's confusing, I just think it helps enforce how Fai/Fay/Fye (however you want to spell it) is sort of stuck in his thoughts and everytime-he-takes-two-steps-forward-he-takes-one-backwards sort of thing.

Anyway, I really liked it! I don't know what you're planning on doing, but I think that if the next chapter were from, say, Kurogane's point of view before you go back to Fai would be interesting and make it a little easier to read (too much of sort of spiral-thinking might make it a little confusing!) :).

Great job!

I really enjoyed reading this, I was captivated and very content while reading this, very good. Thank you.

Wow... that was just... wow... Seriously, the style was absolutely -beautiful- and Fai's character was so good. There was so much Fai in there, but it was just so... broken at the same time. I'm getting the impression of major mental torture and quite a bit of physical. Gah! What's happened to Fai? Why is he in this world? Too many questions! Can't wait for an update!!

Ahem. Anyway, spelling and grammar is good, only one small bit at the beginning I caught

"You can’t say something when you don’t the words"

Should be "when you don't know the words"

Now, I hate those stories that are just walls of texts, but normally I do like a story to have defined paragraphs rather than lots of one-liners, so to speak. But you've pulled it off fantastically. And your characterisation is really, really good. You've captured that so-far-beyond-broken-he's-calm side of Fai perfectly. That child-like quality that just screams mental torture to me is there and makes me really, REALLY want to read more.

Ok, that's enough ranting from me. Off to read your other stories now, and can't wait for an update! XD

Okay...it was awsome...WHY HAVNT YOU UPDATED!?

Update! or I'll poke you!

*glare*

...

*poke*

I rather thing I'm begining to love you to death - enough to tear every last one of my hairs out before I go crazy waiting for the next chapter. =3
PWEASE continue. Hugs.

Wow, that was confusing yet made perfect sense. Poor Fai, it is Fai right? Either that or I just totally misunderstood the story. Anyways it was beautiful and evoked alot of emotions, none of them happy but still excellent work.