Good, you've updated! Good writing, as always. The first part of the chapter was interesting and seemed to add to the mystery, but the second part felt more of a filler; I do wish maybe they'd found out more about Richard's connection with Margolo.

Wouldn't that be wild of Mary Anne and Grace found out they were indirectly related!

I do wish you'd have Mary Anne act human again; you seem to depict her as the villian in most of your stories; do you not like Mary Anne? In canon, she's generally sweet, which is why so many turn to her for a shoulder to cry on...because she's not at all judgmental and is caring and loving.

Love the funny part about Grace mistakenly calling Sunny *Soupy*; that made me laugh!! Sometimes, Grace is clueless.

Hope you have time to update very soon! I know it's hard to find time; I often have trouble finding time to update my stories also.

Good writing; I can't wait until the whole Margolo/Fay/Richard/Sharon mystery is revealed!

Hi mate,

Remember me?! I was ever so excited when I logged on to my email a couple of days ago and noticed that you had updated, and thus, I felt compelled to review this chapter to let you know I am still reading, despite the fact I haven't posted on LJ or MySpaz for an age.

Absolutely cracking effort on your part! This chapter was amazing, I loved it. I especially enjoyed Dawn & Grace's interaction after they'd been to visit Mari - and that "Soupy" comment had me in stitches. I think this chapter really demonstrates that Grace and Dawn are not in tune with each other at all - Grace forgets the name of Dawn's closest friend and Dawn (inadvertently) walks all over Grace's feelings (with regard to her friendship with Mari)... but I like the friendship they share all the same.

I'm really hoping that you're well (let me know!), and I'm hoping that we get another update soonish...?

Cheers mate
xo

Thanks for updating!

I like how you're slowly revealing Grace to us. I feel like I'm beginning to understand why she is the way she is. It would be interesting if another character would start to see Grace losing her composure a bit and becoming (slightly!) more vulnerable. I think you're hinting at it (the need for her to please Mari, trying to explain her feelings towards Mari to Dawn) but it would be nice to see some more of that.

Just a quick bit of constructive criticism: After the sentence, "Dawn joins me...wondering what we do next," a new paragraph starts with, "Next, we ultimately decide to see a movie."

Ending the previous paragraph and beginning a new paragraph with the word next sounds a little awkward. Also, "next, we ultimately..." is a bit redundant. "We ultimately decide..." sounds much better.

Thanks again for the update! Can't wait to read more!

So glad you updated this. Especially love the little twist that Richard Spier plays in this whole Aunt Margolo mystery. Please update again soon!

Wow... apparently Dawn is completely socially retarded. *Tries to hold off from slapping her...

~Y

Thank you for this update! As usual, I loved it, yet can't wait for more :)

an update at last!! i LOVE the family intrigue you've built up and it only gets better. also, i wonder if we'll ever find out what mary anne and dawn are fighting about (or is it the birth control thing that mary anne mentions at the end of bff??).

and richard spier?! who would have thought mary anne's dad was such a stud haha. i loved that he was wearing horn rimmed glasses in the photo. great work as usual!

I read the sequel first, on chance and was so glad to see this story.You are a fantastic, amazing writer. I felt as if I were reading an actual book. I loved the way you developed mostly lesser known characters of Anne's. Phenomenal work, I hope you become an author someday :)

Wow! Every time I read new chapters I am positively riveted! I love how you keep the suspense without making it overly dramatic. The story is well thought out and interesting. I can't wait to read more! :)

Intriguing, esp the end! Hey, your Dawn sounds inconsiderate, just taking Mary Anne's bike without her permission; that's rude to do.

Funny scene about Grace and Dawn cracking up in the library and haunting article about poor Margolo's death.

So, hey, were Margolo, Richard, and Sharon in some threesome little sexcapade...and maybe Margolo and Fay's mom found out and orderd Margolo to break it off, then Margolo found that she was pregnant.

Maybe Allison is one of these narrow-minded, conservative-minded people who believe that all non-marital births are "illegitimate" and now she's indirectly passed on some of her ideas to Grace.

Can't wait to see more, esp. on poor Margolo and what went on with Sharon, Richard, and Margolo's little three-capade!

I love this story. I've never reviewed before because I never had an account, but I made one just so I could tell you how great your stories are.
I love how you have formed Grace's personality. I find her and her family facinating.
I can't wait to see how this story continues.

I'm really glad that you have provided lots of updates recently, it's as great as ever!

I'm so happy to see so many chapters up from you recently! I absolutely love the mystery you're weaving and cannot wait to uncover new pieces of the puzzle as you introduce them. Will be anxiously awaiting your updates!

Wow, wasn't expecting that ending. So, does Mary Anne have a half-sibling out there she doesn't know about?

I'm glad you're updating this story again! Can't wait to read more!

Wow, Fay Blume sound callous when she implies that friends are "replaceable." And Grace sounded like a spoiled brat demanding a new tennis racket; she should babysit or do some other work for it, not demand that her parents buy everything for her. It was kind of funny to read; Grace sounded a lot like Cokie there.

Haunting chapter ending; poor Margolo! That doctor Arthur, despite the laws back then, had no business injecting his "moral" opinion in there for refusing the abortion; if he couldn't do it, he should have tried to refer Margolo to another doctor maybe out of state.

Thank Saturn those dark days of abortions being illegal and non-marital sex and non-marital births being stigmatized are over now.

Kind of stereotypical comment Dawn made about "being from CA..." so she'd have "guessed" about Margolo's true story; not all people from CA are progressive; I'd think a northern state like Connecticut would be more progressive in general. I get the feeling that despite being a New England town, Stoneybrook is actually quite progressive and would have allowed abortion and birth control.

Interesting and truly sad about poor Margolo; I can't wait to see more; maybe Grace will confront her mom and grandma and get them to end their dumbness and talk openly.

I do wish Mary Anne and Dawn would call a truce and quit badmouthing each other; Mary Anne's not some awful ogre.

But good story overall; glad you were able to update again; can't wait to see more!