D: aw man I loved this story too!

great story i have a sugestion so you could finish he story!! How about they wake up may first! ahw qould realize that thsis felt realy nice! then she would fal back asleep! then drew would wake up and comment on how much he loved it in his head! they would stay in bed for really long time cuase they didnt want to get up.. both pretending to be asleep! then they would finally wake up hyly and they would say nothing except be embaressed. then they could walk downstair becky would confron thtem and be mad because they were traveling together she would demand a kiss and they would kiss... they would get so into it so they wouldnt realize that becky had run off cryign thwn they would stop and look at each other blshing.. they would sart on their way to the next town .. then about and hour in walking in silcence they would both ay at the same time there is something i need to say and then at the same time they would say i lovyou! then it would end! how about it!!

what is the next chapter! i want to know!

What's the point of putting up a story if you're never going to finish it? If you're going to start a story, you should stay commited to it, and while putting it on hold is one thing, discontinuing it is another.

My feelings and opinions for this story is rather neutral. It's good, but the A/N's are rather annoying. The characters themselves were rather OOC. Mostly Drew since you ever rarely see/hear him yell, shout, and/or scream, if ever. If I remember correctly, he only did it once or twice out of anger? Not out of randomness?

It's easy to keep May in character since she's this happy-go-lucky, hyper kind of girl. She'll get mad if you steal her food, always full of energy, niave, etc. But as for Drew, that's a lot harder, unless you're a really good writer and/or pretty good at describing people who have a mysterious, arogant, cool kind of thing going on.

A few puncuation, grammar, and spelling mistakes here and there, but not too much to complain about.

This isn't a flame, btw. If it was a flame, I would just say "THIS SUCKED!" etc.

it's okay...

GREAT STORY!somebody finish please bcuz i have terrible writing skills.

How about they wake up, scream, blush, meet becky, make her jealous witha passionate kiss and continue their journey?

aw..u discontinued it! =(

i love chickoritas!!
;-)

i'll take it up if you waqnt to but why are you giving it up in the first place
i mean its a realy great story

you CANT DO THAT! I YA NEED HELP WITH THINKING UP A IDEA COME TO ME! I CAN HELP!

You could call the battle region Orre... Anyways great job so far! i love it!

great story but if you cant continue dont but plz at least try its awesome :)

This is a really good story and I hope you'll continue eventually!

continue! I loved it!