I loved this. Very funny, and the last sentence was perfect. Totally bitter sweet and excellent. 3

aw...that was very cute! (with a little pang of angst in the last sentence) I'm all for River/Komui!

Jeeze, the truth brutally struck me in the face now. Most good, well-written one-shot stories usually end up with reviews in a considerably sad-looking number, while other crap fics get a lot. I wonder why? D

lol this was cute. roles reversed!

XD This is like, the best. I can totally see Linali being this protective. The end seemed kind of wistful, but the rest was -hilarious- "Ah-hah! Problems with commitment."

Perfect.

That was a lot of fun, even if the end was a little serious.

you not know that you that you are dooming you souls to ever lasting doom by writing stuff like Don't get mad at me I just do not like seeing persons dooming there souls.

Suggestion: Remove the last sentence, sounds way too angsty. Otherwise, really good story! I can almost see that happening, knowing how close those two siblings are. Great job!

aside from the last sentence, which is kinda weird and promises angst, the story was great! really funny and subtly sexy. still, i wonder if the last sentence should be there or taken out. i think it should be taken out. just my opinion.