well, the summary said you wanted criticism so...
FLAME FLAME FLAME FLAME FLAME!
...just kidding.
But this did distort some of the characters a bit. It does have some elements of reality (after all, Red is a girl).
But all I have to say about the ending is...what? Forgive my naivete, but I really do not understand what is going on there. Is Perrault the one who is onvolved in that...scene with Red? Why?
Anyway, I like that you tried.