Cliffie! Whoo! Excellent chapter you've go there... interesting!


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wow! I'm so glad you updated this! Although I've been a bit confused at the changing of the chapter's layout/lenght. Threw me off at first...

Well written as always! I can't wait to see what happen next (and see when Sonic will "take revenge" on Lance for his little joke), or how you will explain Sonic's pull towards the blue object into that box (we all know what's inside there, right?).

eheheh, yeah, had to reread from the start to refresh my memory. Glad I did because this fic is of high quality!

Yay for updates!

i've been keeping an eye on this story, glad to see you've updated it. You're building up an interesting web of history, here. Nice to see you've got the elements of Shadow's creation as well as the old school Mega Drive Sonic stuff in there. Keep up the great work.

YES, it's continuing! ^^

I have to say I'm very excited, even if that little chappie distribution trick you pulled had me going "aw...' after all the chappie alerts that had landed in my mailbox. ;)

Your fleetway sonic is so adorable tho, I love it. His frustration with the ledge was awesome and I can't wait to see whether he discovers Kintobor's lab or a sleeping monster in that cave of his. please update soon, great work! :D

Great to see this continued.

HOLYSHIZNITZANUPDATE.

Rawr. Your cliffhangers are the worst - henceforth, the best. I love your portrayal of Sonic, and your OC's should have been included in the original series, they're so well written.

If there's a year+ wait for the next chapter, I solemnly swear that I'll fly an airplane down your superior literary throat.

Or, in case I run of fuel, I'll weep histrionically on my decrepit excuse for a computer chair. I will. Oh yes.

Sorry about my earlier impatience. Anyway... defining Sonic moment, yeah.

Now we get to the blue speed demon we all know and love.

Well, I'm a bit shocked that you decided to remove the third chapter, but that fact that you're switching things around in it means you're still working on the series.

It's good news.

Well, I'm actually unsurprised that Sonic got the bob beaky idea from Kintobor.

He had to get it from somewhere. The race was great, but I bet there's going to be some sort of deus ex machina to save him somehow.

Well, thanks for the chapters you made, and please continue.

Well, I'm reading it thanks. It doesn't take a genius to notice our dear Kintobors intervention.

This young Sonic is very much what I envisioned him to be prior to the STC series. Hell, I'd have loved to see a comic based around it.

Hmm, actually that's not a bad idea. Pity I'm tied up, but someday... In the far off future...

I also very much like the way you brought Porker into the mix, and I even find Lance delightfully unlikeable.

You've captured the spirit of the old Sonic tales very well and if you continue to provide fiction I'll read. Now I'm going to check some of your other pieces before I have my usual 2 AM to 4AM kip.

PLEASE tell me you will continue this story at some point! There is an indefinable excellence to it that has me hooked like none before it, and not getting to read more is almost literaly painful... That was a little dramatic, no?

Walked into Lance? Backwards!! XD
I laughed out loud at that idea! You are funny!! Your writing is impressive! Good job mate! ^_^

*evil smile* :3 maybe he will... *evil laugh* make more! I wanna read what happens! X3

How very bucolic.

I'll toss my criticism in first, so I can get it out of the way. The chapter is too long! This is especially damaging when it's unfailingly well-written and GOOD prose; because by the time I come here, to the review button, I've forgotten half of the clever devices you employed near the start, that I would have drawn complimentary attention to if they hadn't been pushed out of my brain and/or buried under the mountain of OTHER things I want to effuse about.

K.

Daydream: excellent, passing itself off as reality and then being groggily, reluctantly dragged back into a tedious classroom. Win.

Frustrated loop-rage: excellent, that Sonic is unable, but determined, to do something which becomes so easy for him in later years. Emphasises the fact that this is a young, inexperienced hedgehog, instantly familiar and yet distinct from what he becomes. Win.

Lance: excellent, a convincing portrayl of the generic village bully, made to sound both menacing and pathetic at the same time. The other character's attitudes to him seem spot-on, as well. Win.

Best part: the image you paint of the idyllic laziness of the Emerald Hill Zone, and even Mobius as a whole, when Sonic gazes into the breeze at the Metropolis Zone, that you already described as "coexisting happily with... acres of unspoiled wilderness". Even though it's essentially utopian, you really get inside Sonic's head, showing that it's a boring paradise.

And THAT'S clever. ;)

I think, yes, he would let Sonic fall. -But- the ravine isn't very deep and there's really only a trickle of water at the bottom.

...But then again, cheese is the nastiest thing ever created right next to scrambled eggs and egg yolk. So, I could be wrong.