|Reviews for Hell Hole|
| Volcanic 12/12/06 . chapter 8
Very good story! I hope to see more soon!
| DeafLizgon 12/9/06 . chapter 8
It's sad, it had huge affect on Sango worse than InuYasha and others...
To Next Village! _
Keep it up!
| Magi Nova 12/8/06 . chapter 7
Great story so far! The writing style is concise, yet descriptive, and very riveting - a pleasure to read. Looking forward to the next update!
| DeafLizgon 11/24/06 . chapter 7
True. They (Sango, InuYasha, and Shippo) are trained to sense demons. (I hope I read websites right)
Boy, InuYasha fell in void of confusion again. But he's right, this is scary. (nod)
| DeafLizgon 11/6/06 . chapter 6
Hm... purple flash thing? How interesting. (grin) Only monks and mikos can see a flash? Wow, mystery call for me! (rubbing her hands happily) I can hardly wait for this!
Haha, Inuyasha can't say no to ramen. _ He's like a cute puppy can't say no to treat. (hugs Inu)
| DeafLizgon 11/1/06 . chapter 5
Whoa... So that's how Naraku plans to rid of Miroku...
Miroku better to be came out alright. Since Miroku's out cold, what's happening to InuYasha and the others? O_O
Keep updated up! _ I love this chapter very much!
| DeafLizgon 10/25/06 . chapter 4
Too late, InuYasha. (shake head) Naraku already got a time demon by his side.
I wonder what Naraku's plan for to get rid of Miroku and others...? Can't wait for next chapter! _
| DeafLizgon 10/8/06 . chapter 3
(sigh in relief) Too close for comfort... Sango's right, something scared that Taimu. I bet it could be do something with a curse Miroku had leashed upon her.
Poor Miroku. Nearly have a heart attack when you see a friend suddenly appear in the path of a cursed wind tunnel.
Keep it up! _
| Thinkingisforsmartpeople 9/27/06 . chapter 2
"'Your such an idiot!' Kagome began thumping the ground with her fist."
-It would be "You're", the contraction for "You are.."
Please, please go back and capitilize your "I"'s.
In a couple of places, you put "!.?" Please go back and delete the period.[Update] Please, please go back and fix all the places where you did this. [Second Update] Why are you putting a period in the middle of the exclamation point and question mark?
"'Your usually up by now!'"
-Again, it is "You're"
- "Sit" wouldn't be capitilized
"'...and is already at it's strongest...'"
-It isn't "it's", which is a contraction of for "it is". The ONLY time where you would use "It's" is when you are saying "It is". It would be "its" even though it is possesive.
"'...even through these tree's.'"
- The tree's what? What does the tree have? The correct way to plurelize "trre" is "trees". No apostrophe, which makes it possesive.
"prayer and respect (atleast i think that's what it means)."
- No grammatical error, just please refrain from putting random author's notes in the middle of a fanfiction. And yes, it can show respect.
"'...dieing the next morning...'"
- The correct spelling would be "dying".
And so on. If you can have someone go through and check it hat would be great. Otherwise it is a wonderful and unique story.
| Thinkisforsmartpeople 9/27/06 . chapter 1
Lovely story; better then most. Although, I think you need to go back through and capitilize some of your "I"'s
| DeafLizgon 9/21/06 . chapter 2
(winces) InuYasha still don't understand how Miroku feeling. I'm beginning to like another monk who can see InuYasha's a half demon and half human.
I feel sorry for all people that turned into old age. (muttering death treats against the Time Demon)
However, I get a chill feeling that Miroku will be in VERY DANGER than his companions.
Keep it going! _
| DeafLizgon 9/21/06 . chapter 1
(hugs Miroku) Poor Miroku. (shake head) Why can't InuYasha understand that Miroku don't mean for to nearly swallow Sango, even if he didn't realize what's going on with his curse.
Perhaps...is the curse strong?
Hmm... _ Updated soon!